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jlsavell
Gayle, sweet friend, most honored and humbled.

Jimi
11-Oct-2015
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A Creature's Steward by jlsavell

Exceptional
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Ah, Jimi, what a tender, wonderful poem about someone who had a great influence on your life. I never knew any of my relatives, so when I read about relationships like this I get a vicarious pleasure. How lucky for you to have known such man.

Here's a sixer!

Hugs,
Gayle


P1
again thank you so much for all the stars
06-Oct-2015
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Before The Cancer by P1

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Hi Paige,

I found your poem so moving and the artwork completed the picture to perfection. I am a strong believer in euthanasia and if I misinterpreted the poem, please forgive me.

How can anyone disagree with this final right? In a world where we can concur with abortion, a procedure involving the taking of another person's life without their input,
and yet say that a person of sound mind and age has no right to make the decision to end their own life after due thought and consideration rather than writhing in agony for the remainder of their 'life'? This is convoluted thinking, imho.

Anyway, your poem stirred great emotion in me, as it was meant to do! Here, have a sixer!

Gayle


jlsavell
Thank you sweet friend. I am just a,wannabe master at free verse, but I love the vote!

Thank you for being such a lotal supporter of my endeavors.

Hugs to you

Jimi
27-Sep-2015
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Mood Wrung by jlsavell

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This was simply outstanding, Jimi. Very dark and sinister, gave me goosebumps at times. This free verse is excellent and you are a master at it.

Great job,

Hugs,
Gayle


jlsavell
Gayle, dear friend, my best to you and yours.. How are you feeling. Thank you so very much. I appreciate you and your friendship.. Jimi
13-Sep-2015
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A Beauty (Emmy) by jlsavell

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Hi Jimi,

God sends us these amazing fur-babies as special gifts, I think. I've had so many over the years, each one different and unique, loving. Indeed, age creeps up on us unseen - one day you're 40, in your prime, they say, next day you're 70.

Great poem, my friend,
Gayle


lancellot
Thank you very much, Gayle.
27-Aug-2015
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Child Support Court by lancellot

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Hey Lance, excellent chapter. Just makes you crazy, how some people are born believing the world owes them everything. And what a great twist that he'd been planning on asking her to marry him.

Great one!

Hugs,
Gayle


Sasha
These children are fighting for their lives and no one wants them. Mexico is a very poor country and can hardly take care of it own. At least America could try to take some of these children and raise them. Many die every day and each one just wants what every child wants, a chance to be happy, get an education and live without fear. The Guatemalan government is one of the poorest in the world and they don't have the money, resources, or desire to help these children. They have openly said they wish they would all die. Half of the police force belongs to the gangs.
27-Aug-2015
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Children Living in the Fourth World by Sasha

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Hi Sasha, yes the plight of the poor in the world is horrific, and one that has existed forever. It's funny how Mexico feels justified in deporting their illegals, but they think we should just swallow all their illegals! Kinda makes me laugh.

Below are some editing needs to consider:

simply means(,) dropped off across - don't need comma

ensure not insure

intp s/b into

Because of the poverty and desperation{,} the gangs and coyotes - add comma

A few make it across the river{, add} but those that do(, delete) are also beaten and robbed when they arrive on the Mexican side.

threaten then {them}with rape

Hope you're having a nice summer,

Gayle


Jay Squires
Ah! Thanks so much, Gayle. Your 6 means a lot. Your words a lot more.
27-Aug-2015
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Columbo, Monk & the Busted Rung by Jay Squires

Chapter 2 of the book THE POCKET OF PUMPKIN PULP

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Phew! Jay, what an excellent chapter. I was on the edge of my seat although I still don't know why (as the reader.) As the author, you tricky dickens, you were craftily leading me down the path.

Paul is weird, probably psychotic himself. I cannot wait for the next chapter! And poor Lillian, oy!

Here, have a sixer for this super duper chapter!

Hugs,
Gayle


Sasha
think you completely missed the point of this post. Children are dying every day
27-Aug-2015
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Children Living in the Fourth World by Sasha

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Hi Sasha, yes the plight of the poor in the world is horrific, and one that has existed forever. It's funny how Mexico feels justified in deporting their illegals, but they think we should just swallow all their illegals! Kinda makes me laugh.

Below are some editing needs to consider:

simply means(,) dropped off across - don't need comma

ensure not insure

intp s/b into

Because of the poverty and desperation{,} the gangs and coyotes - add comma

A few make it across the river{, add} but those that do(, delete) are also beaten and robbed when they arrive on the Mexican side.

threaten then {them}with rape

Hope you're having a nice summer,

Gayle


Jay Squires
Gail, I know I answered this and about 10 others that somehow didn't go through. Thanks you so much for your suggestions. Nothing's minutiae.
23-Aug-2015
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The Pocket of Pumpkin Pulp by Jay Squires

Chapter 1 of the book THE POCKET OF PUMPKIN PULP

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Oh, goody! I'm at the first chapter! This is a good one, Jay. I have no idea which way you're headed, but you have several routes you can take!

I've got my editor's cap on right now, so forgive my sifting minutiae.

ly adjectives - not many, just a note to self, lol

In it, he was standing beside the mayor, who was cutting the ribbon - {In it, he stood beside the mayor as he cut the ribbon} As I say, minutiae.

she tested her smile! Love it!

the binder, spread out in front of him - I don't think we need the comma.

This is a really good chapter and I'll hurry over and make a fan so I get the notices!

Hugs,
Gayle


Jay Squires
Ah, bless you, Girl. Thanks so much for reading this and I'm popping my buttons that you enjoyed it. I through all the instances of present and past perfect tenses by putting "ing" in Find/Replace on Word and look them over carefully. Usually I opt for the active rather than the passive. I'm not sure here. I'll look at it again.

As far as the comma goes, I originally didn't have it there, but someone told me I needed it there because of a non-substantive clickity clause that causes the verb to be confused with the nominative adverb ... so I couldn't add a comma fast enough. I'll re-think that now. Thanks again, Gayle.
23-Aug-2015
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The Pocket of Pumpkin Pulp by Jay Squires

Chapter 1 of the book THE POCKET OF PUMPKIN PULP

Excellent
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Oh, goody! I'm at the first chapter! This is a good one, Jay. I have no idea which way you're headed, but you have several routes you can take!

I've got my editor's cap on right now, so forgive my sifting minutiae.

ly adjectives - not many, just a note to self, lol

In it, he was standing beside the mayor, who was cutting the ribbon - {In it, he stood beside the mayor as he cut the ribbon} As I say, minutiae.

she tested her smile! Love it!

the binder, spread out in front of him - I don't think we need the comma.

This is a really good chapter and I'll hurry over and make a fan so I get the notices!

Hugs,
Gayle



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