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jpduck
Many thanks for this rewarding review, Jack, and for the shiny things. I'm so glad you are enjoying 'Time & Again'. I have checked out awoken/awakened in 'Fowler's Modern English Usage', and it appears that both are correct past participle forms.

Adrian
20-Jul-2015
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Chapter 13 Introducing Mr Henderson by jpduck

Chapter 13 of the book Time & Again -- A Novel

Exceptional
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Damn, Adrian, this gets better and better. Another excellent read. I was hoping this episode wouldn't end so I'd find out whether Mr. H. believed Nick. Will have to wait until next time. BTW, a small glitch. If you don't agree just ignore it. You said awoken suddenly. Should be 'awakened'. Just a quick comment.

Best
Jack


Jay Squires
I didn't even notice the Two Tuxedos. How funny!
19-Jul-2015
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Two Tuxedos by Scrivener

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You've a good plotline developed here, Scrivener. It's entertaining and believable enough to keep the reader engaged. I hope the suggestions I offer will help parts of the chapters unfold more effectively. These are, of course, suggestions, to accept or reject as you wish. Here are a few observations:

"I think our teacher, Mr. McGregor, said people back then weren't [I think he wouldn't have said "our teacher". It indicates the author's need to provide info to the reader.]

With their youthful curiousity getting the better of them, [...their youthful CURIOSITY ... >> I don't believe yours is the UK spelling.]

The teenagers were now intensely frightened; [can you show their fear, rather than tell the reader about it?]

"You okay, Ben?," Sean asked. "Yeah, you?," [You shouldn't have a comma after the two question marks.]

Will look forward to the remaining chapters.




jpduck
Goodness! What a wonderful review. Thank you for reading, writing the review and for the six stars. There are interesting times ahead for the Harrisons.

Adrian
29-Jun-2015
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Chapter 9 -- Swimming by jpduck

Chapter 9 of the book Time & Again -- A Novel

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This work has reached the exceptional level

Another damned good read, Adrian. I love being along on this journey with Nick/Nicholas. Today, I could see and feel that ominous waterway. You have a great way with words. Congrats!

Jack


ElPoetry001
Special editing has been done, it was had to swallow, not fun. Yet, I learned.
Thank you
14-Jun-2015
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A Plan Gone Bad by ElPoetry001

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After 'police found' use of 'she' and 'he' incorrect pronouns Should be him and her.
After 'The example of parents' and in five other instances in this para, there is a caret and two question marks. This unusual anomaly also appears in some subsequent paras. I don't believe you intended this.

In addition to your unusual punctuation, you have only one spelling error I can see: syndrom is spelled syndrome, in Free Lunch Syndrome. Keep writing, Elpoetry1, but try not to become too political.


jpduck
Golly Moses! What a review! Thank so much -- and for the six stars. Dinner will be served again next Sunday.

14-Jun-2015
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Settling In by jpduck

Chapter 8 of the book Time & Again -- A Novel

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This work has reached the exceptional level

Another excellent read, Adrian. Your superb writing is like a fine meal; I cannot wait until the next course. . .er, chapter. Keep 'em coming.

Jack


emkoutny
Thanks Jack! I will check them out.
09-Jun-2015
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The Ghost's Locket-10 by emkoutny

Chapter 10 of the book The Ghost's Locket

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I thoroughly enjoyed your story, emkoutny. This chapter of The Ghost's Locket was truly absorbing. I have done middle grade stories myself, my favorite genre. This story was a great read. Keep up the great work.

Jack


jpduck
Thank you so much for this wonderful review and for the six stars. I am sorry about the frustration of waiting for chapters. It takes me a full week of frantic reviewing to build up enough funny money properly to promote each chapter.

Adrian
08-Jun-2015
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Chapter 7 -- Denport Abbey School by jpduck

Chapter 7 of the book Time & Again -- A Novel

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Another terrific chapter, Adrian. Now you have me thoroughly hooked. It's becoming frustrating waiting for new chapters. As always, a great read. Keep up the excellent work.

Cheers!
Jack


emkoutny
Thanks for the encouragement! Also, the excellent rating and for taking the time to review my work.
08-Jun-2015
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The Ghost's Locket-10 by emkoutny

Chapter 10 of the book The Ghost's Locket

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I thoroughly enjoyed your story, emkoutny. This chapter of The Ghost's Locket was truly absorbing. I have done middle grade stories myself, my favorite genre. This story was a great read. Keep up the great work.

Jack


Nan Beeson
Wow! "Exceedingly well?" I simply must repeat here the rest of what you said, it is so endearing to me. "A truly fascinating script of which I'd love to see a production. I'll be looking forward to Nan Beeson's scripts in the future.": That means so very much to me, and your sincerity brought tears to my eyes. What I do not understand is why Act Two, etc. always shows up before Act One or preceding one! Sincerely, Nan
03-Jun-2015
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Pauly Dipper (Act Two, Final Act) by Nan Beeson

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Exceedingly well done, Nan. A truly fascinating script of which I'd love to see a production. I'll be looking forward to Nan Beeson's scripts in the future.

Jack


jpduck
Thanks for this great review, and for the six stars. I must try to find time to read 'The Ring'.

Adrian
03-Jun-2015
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Chapter 6 -- Nick's Legacy by jpduck

Chapter 6 of the book Time & Again -- A Novel

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Your tale becomes more and more fascinating, Adrian and well worth six stars. My own story "The Ring" is also about going back in time, but yours is unique and, as usual, a great read. Looking forward to more chapters.

Jack



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