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victortouche
Thank you.
09-Oct-2019
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Wallin' by victortouche

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I love that my initial question from reading the title was asked and answered in the poem. It was a clear poem with good voice and dialogue. It told a story. Good job.


victortouche
I write in the so-called "Gestalt" method-basically means to elicit feelings, images, unbid by cognitive function, one must "feel" Gestalt poetry. And you did. U didn't cognitivelly connevt with all parts. But U still gave it a good rating and weren't sure (perhaps) why. That is when Gestalt poetry is working, my friend. Thank you.
03-Feb-2016
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Words and We, and Maybe by victortouche

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Wonderful and honest answer to your friend's question. The rhyme scheme is spot on, and yes "poetry is pain" I do not totally understand the image or its connection to the poem.


Nosha17
Thank you so much for your great review. I am delighted you enjoyed it, Faye
22-Nov-2015
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A Stormy Day by Nosha17

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I really enjoy the images of the poem. To me there is a great amount of strength and power in event the first two lines. The speaker is strolling while the "waves lash fiercely" One would think that the waves would be the powerful one but the contrast between the casual stroll and the lashing is one to ponder.


frogbook
Thanks so much, I am so pleased you enjoyed. I just loved that pic when I found it-it was just what I had in mind.
21-Nov-2015
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Such Sweet Sorrow by frogbook

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I do enjoy a humorous poem. I am currently teaching Romeo and Juliet so this poem brings me much joy. The picture is a great addition as well. Good job!


justfos
Thank You for your review, I am pleased you enjoyed it. I wrote a response a day or two after you reviewed it, but somehow it did't save - It very clear I am a New Bee here..
13-Sep-2015
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Mt. Morris,WI in the warm months #1 by justfos

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This is a beautiful story with many great visuals: "deer seem to have sent their babes out on their own", "Doe loudly snorted and stomped " (do not capitalize doe)... Great job


mermaids
A series of these poems for a book sounds like a great idea. Love your review. Thanks so much. Elaine
03-Sep-2015
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Flying Foxes by mermaids

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Beautiful poem. I really enjoyed the alliteration of the first stanza and the simplicity of the last. You could do a series of these for a book. Great job!


Benjamin Valencia
Hi Chrissy, I have to agree sometimes the notes give a lot of the blub. I wouldn't take out the word, just substitute it as a suggestion.
30-Aug-2015
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Dreams by Chunger

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Hi Chunger. First of all; My sincere condolences. Second, Wow. Profound is the word that I'm looking for as to describe everything between "dream" and "nightmare." "Dream" because it can branch into either subtle or nigtmarish. "Subtle" That's the word I like instead of your use of 'dead'.
I understand that the use of 'dead' echoes the nightmare to reflect, 'nightmares as dark and deadly" however, in this case, "dead" is too harsh to describe a baby whose never known life. "She is still___(She remains still) (subtle)...This gives the effect of the true Nightmare. Again Chunger, My heart goes out to you! My best regards and cheers.


MissMerri
Thank you so much for your clear and understanding comments on my blank verse sonnet. I am so glad you enjoyed the imagery. Your words meant a lot to me. MM
30-Aug-2015
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The Ever Rolling Waves by MissMerri

Chapter 6 of the book Along the Shores of Time

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There is great imagery in this poem "where tiny creatures shaped like mushrooms dance and orcas keen a song of loneliness." It creates a feeling of magic and beauty. The tone changes almost to sad as the poem continues, but almost sad, not completely because the reader knows that the "friend" is in this beautiful place. Good job.


royowen
Thanks so much for the great review, kind words and excellent rating, sorry I'm so late, been away for a week, blessings, Roy.
29-Aug-2015
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Age becomes me. by royowen

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The first stanza here is very powerful. The speaker is clearly content with their life and welcomes the after life...if that is what the Lord has in store. Great job.


Light322
I will add some punctuation for very delivery.
27-Aug-2015
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I have always carried it with me... by Light322

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This story confuses me because of the format of the paragraphs and the lack of punctuation. Looks more like it should be a poem. I would insert the word 'a' in the first line if this were a regular paragraph, but it is suppose to be read as a poem then I may reconsider.



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