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Lucian Carter

bertodi
thank you
03-Mar-2019
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Comfort zone! by bertodi

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Stylistically I like this. The form is interesting. But I found the content got lost in the structure. Despite reading it twice, its contents remain a mystery. Was that the intent? Or was the message lost in the medium?

The image is great. It captures a sense of ennui that reflects the poem.


bertodi
thank you
03-Mar-2019
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season's leaves and mathematics by bertodi

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Interesting topic. You got way more out of it than I ever would have thought.

Fall leaves are cool, but raking? Not so much. I may prefer spring, and the smell of fresh cut grass, but you make a great case for autumn. Thanks for sharing.


bertodi
thank you
03-Mar-2019
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program of Injustice Imperial by bertodi

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I wish I knew more context on this poem. Currently, I get some interesting ideas and emotions from it, but for the most part, I'm lost. Maybe you need some author notes on this one?


Cranial Thinker
Thank you so very much Lucian Carter for this wonderfully honest well received review and fair understandable review again thank you so very much....Cranial Thinker
10-May-2018
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Man's Logical Mind? by Cranial Thinker

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I've got to admit, I got a bit lost. The style and language are thick enough to obscure the meaning. It's an interesting read, but I found the flow a bit choppy. I can live with one line in all caps, normally something I hate, because you did have a message you wanted to shout out.

I think your main message is the contrast of earthly logic with otherworldy spiritual existence. I'm not sure the two have to be in conflict, but in the end, I think I got where you are coming from.


kaymart
Thank you!
27-Mar-2018
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Lune? by kaymart

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I hear you.

I went digging in the rankings list and found someone at the tail end to review one of their pieces. Please pay it forward.

This works as a Lune and tells its message in a forthright manner. I'd add a comma at the end of the first line. I'm clinically insane myself and it's not all bad.


godlucifer
thank you for the time of day for your review,lucian carter! "your so vein" means mood or humor.

your so vein
godlucifer
25-Feb-2018
For the review on
a perfect science by godlucifer

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This is a really interesting structure. Bobbing and weaving in form and meaning. I think you captured your intentions perfectly. I envy your style. Great job.


Sylvia Kennedy
HI
LUCIAN.
THANKS
FOR
READING
AND
BEING
ABLE TO
APPRECIATE
MY
WRITING.
THANKS
FOR
SHARING
YOUR
COMMENTS AND
RATINGS.
SK
20-Feb-2018
For the review on
None-The-Less by Sylvia Kennedy

Chapter 82 of the book SPECIAL TWEEN TO SPECIAL TWEEN

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This hits the mark well. The style flows well. "Cycled broken record" is an amazing metaphor. A reminder that a lot of criminals end up in jail, dead, or a shell of a human being. And spiritually, I can't imagine taking joy in harming others so dramatically. Nice piece.


frierajac
cheers.
20-Feb-2018
For the review on
Any Given Day by Lucian Carter

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This has a lot of charm and I can see two people who are apart most of the time and at work and have to arrange to have a moment to be together once in a while.
Thanks it is cheering.


Sherman541
you are very welcome :)
20-Feb-2018
For the review on
Midgard Bites by Lucian Carter

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Just goes to prove you can write about any topic and it works, if it is done right. You have a very nicely written poem that rhymes perfectly. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541


Sherman541
you are very welcome :)
20-Feb-2018
For the review on
Any Given Day by Lucian Carter

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Love, the Love poem. So simple everyday attitude and how love is always with us, when we truly love someone, in any situation. Very Lovely, I am sure your Valentine is very happy to be so. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541



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