Commentary and Philosophy Poetry posted March 15, 2019

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When inhibitions are erased!

The Bar

by Raffaelina Lowcock

The Bar

Smoke filtered through my hair
Rested on my shoulders
Waiting to choke me when I opened my mouth
To speak
While half live but flat tones of music
Pestered my ears

The room, crowded with light headed gigglers
And crazy mixed up cats
Oozed with the stench of stale tobacco and beer
And not being with the spirit
I did not care for it
Yet I lingered

I lifted my drink and slowly sipped
As a little time passed I found
I no longer pierced the darkness questioningly,
Melodic music floated to my ears in muted tones
While I
Stripped of snobbish criticism
Felt great and very much with it

Also, just as one and one makes two
The difference, was you.

The Drink Poetry writing prompt entry
Writing Prompt
Write a poem. You (or your character) take a sip of a drink and feel different. What happens?

Our attitudes are usually pretty steady, but we have to admit that there is always a certain protocol that we are embracing. Yet, alcohol is the culprit for stripping away our hesitance toward are true feelings.
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