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Football - A Novel

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A mother faces life's struggles.

24 total reviews 
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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So glad that Katherine has friends to help her each day. It's a good thing when she jogs in the morning she has a companion with her, too. She is a very brave lady. Running in the dark is questionable.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
    You're wonderful.
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-It is a nice photo, Barbara.
-I almost called you Katherine!
-Effective use of descriptive detail.
-I like how you weave the dogs'
awareness and concern throughout the story.
-Obviously, something is going on.
-If I remember right, I think dogs were
give samples of clothing to try and
find Mr. Frost, but it was probably the
police dogs, but it does make me
think about this situation, too.
-The rapport between Katherine
and Gabe is getting better, and
I like Sarah's character, too.
-Have a wonderful holiday!

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Pam (respa) on 24-Dec-2020
    You are welcome.
Comment from Sanku
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Both the dogs sensed that something was wrong.So there is something that is not exactly right. Good dialogues and smooth flow. I enjoy your style very much.

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from w.j.debi
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What would be a pleasant morning has a sinister hint to it. You raise the tension with the dogs growling at intervals throughout the morning. Excellent dialogue to reveal your characters.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
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This was another good read. It kept me interested from beginning to end. The mystery you added, keeps me wanting to read the next segment. Use of space is always great.

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
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It's interesting to have Katherine's mom helping out. She needs it. You really show how difficult it is for a single mom to work out all the details of a job and taking care of the children. The dogs are acting as if something is up. Does that mean more difficulty for Katherine? With a trickster lawyer, a guy could probably get out of jail. Katherine has had a lot to deal with, and she hasn't actually started teaching yet. If she ends up coaching the girls' cross country team, that'll be an added challenge. I would like to see Katherine with a romantic interest other than Coach. He needs to look outside the school too. It would provide a new angle. Great characterization. judi

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by judiverse on 21-Dec-2020
    You're very welcome. judi
Comment from sandramitchell
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There is danger out there, and Daisy knows it. The danger stayed after Coach left, so it seems it's target is Katherine. Is it Frost? Or a relative of his? Something is going on, and that's besides what slowing going on between the Katherine and Gabrial. Hmm. Romance in the air?? Another excellent part, my friend. Well done. Have a wonderful Christmas, and let's pray for a better 2021. :)) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
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This is a wonderful story to follow. Those dogs growling even has me concerned. Dogs can be very protective. They sense something...

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
    Those dogs' reaction has me concerned. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
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I am enjoying this novel. The characters seem real and the dialogue unforced. There is always enough to keep us wondering (here, why are the dogs growling and on edge?) Looking forward to the next.

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Okay, the two coaches are getting along and the kids seems to like this teaming up. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter and Merry Christmas.

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the kind review.