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Historical Classic Western

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Comment from Pam (respa)
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-You chose a good image,
and wrote a wonderful homage
to JB and his life.
-It was full of feeling and emotion
that spilled from the page.
-Being a fan of JB, I didn't
know if I wanted to know
the epilogue, but you did him justice.
-He got to see "little (now big") Norm,
and learn about his father and mother.
-I imagine that brought some closure for him.
-I like how Norm quickly changed the
topic, seeing JB getting a bit wound up.
-I can see where he wouldn't want
the honor and the article about him.
-It was sad that he couldn't have seen
Norm's family, but you did him and JB
justice at the end.
-As you know, I will miss JB very much,
and I can't say enough about your
characterization of him.
-Good luck with your publishing, Ben,
it was an honor to read your story.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
    I really appreciate you and your kind reviews. So glad you liked J B.
reply by Pam (respa) on 03-Feb-2021
    You are very welcome, Ben. I appreciate your reply.
Comment from Ulla
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Oh, Ben, this is a beautiful and bittersweet ending to a lovely and very educative tale. Yes, the white man's decease was a curse to the Indians. Like in toady's pandemic, they had no defences.The settlers never understood that.
I've just finished reading 'Barkskins' by Annie Proulx. She is from Seattle and her wonderful and historical novel touches on all the issues raised in your novel.
I will miss your story. Please do write another one. Ulla xx

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
    Got something in the meal. Thanks Ulla.
reply by Ulla on 31-Jan-2021
    I'm glad to hear it.:)))
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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What a melancholy end to wonderful story. Ben.
You wrapped it all up in a fancy ribbon and tied it in a lovely bow. J.B. Wright has been laid to rest. Great job.
Nancy:)

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
    Thank you very kindly Nancy. Thanks for being my friend.
reply by nancy_e_davis on 31-Jan-2021
    My pleasure. Nancy:)
Comment from Sally Law
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I'm glad you added an epilogue and left us with an ending. I was sorry to hear the ending of Amitola and Little Shirt by cholera.

A few improvements for your consideration.

J B sat trying to remember that day, asking, "do you still ride?" You have end quotes, but no beginning quote marks.

[Chippendale chair] made by craftsman, Thomas Chippendale.

Sending you my best today and blessings always,
Sal :))

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
    Thanks Sal for all your helpful reviews. Thanks for your friendship.
reply by Sally Law on 31-Jan-2021
    You are most welcome, my friend. :))
Comment from sandramitchell
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The winter scene is more appropriate, Chuck, the winter of JB, and his falling into his final sleep to join the Spirits in the sky, was so sad and so touching. I was so happy to know what had happened to Lottie and Little Norm. That the child came to find him when he was a man, to let JB (and us) know what happened to them.
I was so sad to read that Little Shirt and Amitola had died of cholera. They brought so much joy to JB.

Well, my friend, this has been a journey that has brought about many emotions and I've enjoyed every word of it. Well done!!! :)) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
    I am honored that you, a magnificent writer has found favor in my little story.
    I hope you are well.
    My blessings to you, Sandy.
Comment from Earl Corp
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Wow! I am honored you took my advice and wrote the epilogue. Hard to believe JB made it to the 20th Century. It was cool he got to see Norman again before passing on. It was sad about Amitola and Little Shirt. Very nice job, I wish I still had a six star rating left to give you. I can't wait for your next project.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
    I wish to do another story featuring the days of the Apache and their times of defense. Lozan was a female warrior who rode with Geronimo. I have lived in this region among the Navajo for three years.
    I am not sure if my health will allow but I will rest for now and give it try later.
    My blessings to you.
    Thanks for being my friend.
Comment from RGstar
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Nicely done Ben. All the traits of an excellent writer, this did not disappoint. On the contrary. A nice level chapter, as if I always knew the storyline.
I felt comfortable reading, didn't have to chase or hurry or probe. I was ready for chapter two.
Well done.
I wanted to come support on seeing your name.
My best wishes.
Have a great weekend.
RG

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
    I wish to do another story featuring the days of the Apache and their times of defense. Lozan was a female warrior who rode with Geronimo. I have lived in this region among the Navajo for three years.
    I am not sure if my health will allow but I will rest for now and give it try later.
    My blessings to you.
    Thanks for being my friend.
    In my opinion there are poets and then there are poets but you are are a cut above the rest.
    Very glad you found time to comment on my little take of how the west was stolen.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
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This is an absolutely wonderful epilogue! That is the perfect ending to a wonderful book. Such great writing skills must never be lost. Do continue another story.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
    I wish to do another story featuring the days of the Apache and their times of defense. Lozan was a female warrior who rode with Geronimo. I have lived in this region among the Navajo for three years.
    I am not sure if my health will allow but I will rest for now and give it try later.
    My blessings to you.
    Thanks for being my friend.
reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 30-Jan-2021
    Oh, please do. Plan while you rest!
Comment from Raul1
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I have enjoyed reading your chapter of this book. It is original and unique. I like it very much. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Nice job. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
    I wish to do another story featuring the days of the Apache and their times of defense. Lozan was a female warrior who rode with Geronimo. I have lived in this region among the Navajo for three years.
    I am not sure if my health will allow but I will rest for now and give it try later.
    My blessings to you.
    Thanks for being my friend.
reply by Raul1 on 30-Jan-2021
    You're welcome!
Comment from damommy
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Awwww, so sad. But he certainly had an adventurous life and a loving family. I guess this is the end of the JB stories. I was hoping to learn more of his life with his family after he stopped scouting.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
    I wish to do another story featuring the days of the Apache and their times of defense. Lozan was a female warrior who rode with Geronimo. I have lived in this region among the Navajo for three years.
    I am not sure if my health will allow but I will rest for now and give it try later.
    My blessings to you.
    Thanks for being my friend.
reply by damommy on 30-Jan-2021
    That sounds interesting. Take good care of yourself, and don't wear yourself out. 8-)