Reviews from

Football - A Novel

Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Football Chapter 11 part 2"
A mother faces life's struggles.

24 total reviews 
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

so glad that she is talking about her life....probably she can feel better about certain situations if she speaks about her life with her late husband...as they say, keeping things bottled up is not good either.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Begin Again
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Hello Barbara - Seems as if your characters what to know (and your readers too) more about each other, but they tippy-toe back and forth - (teasing the reader as well). It's a pleasant scene of family and possible relationships in the making. Very enjoyable! As for Texas - take care. It really looks bad. Sip one of those Margaritas and write - far more enjoyable! Smiles!

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 19-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

A cliff-hanger! Can't wait till she spills the beans. Touching and intense!

"[They=>I] do, but I can follow directions."

As soon as the words were heard, Gabriel gulped.
Sugg: When Gabriel heard the words, he flinched.


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2021
    I like that. Thank you for the help.
Comment from eliz100
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

One sentence ended with cooking skills lacked. When I read it I asked myself lacked what. It might flow smoother if the wording was lacked cooking skills. This is another good installment.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2021
    I will recheck that sentence. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Well, well, now it's about time they start sharing a little personal information, so that this romance can pick up steam and get to the mushy stuff. LOL. Just teasing. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
    Katherine will on share a little. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

-I was just getting into the story, Barb,
and it ended. I was waiting to read
about George!
-This was a good family gathering,
and the relationship between Gabriel
and Katherine is progressing.
-I liked how they showed concern
for one another, and the scene
with the game was good, too.
-It will be interesting to learn
about George, although I don't
think Katherine is thrilled about
the prospect of talking about it.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
    We will get a little about George. More to come at a later date. LOL I like to tease. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Pam (respa) on 15-Feb-2021
    I know that is a good quality, to leave the reader wanting more but couldn't resist mentioning it! You are welcome for the review. Sorry to hear about all the snow you are getting.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
    It's 3 degrees here. I think Mother Nature somehow got lost. LOL
reply by Pam (respa) on 15-Feb-2021
    That is cold!!!! It is 38 right now in NJ. That is the highest we've been in a number of weeks. I think you are right about Mother Nature!
Comment from Ben Colder
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Sounds like a fun family with clean thoughts, families like that are hard to find now days. Sorry I have been away from your story but I picked up real easy.
I know your style and it is easy.
Thanks for sharing. Good one Barb.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy Gordon
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Your gentle story continues in its informal natural style with glimpses into their various lives. The characters, like most of us, "put their foot in it" at times, and so are realistic. Keep writing!

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
    Thank you for the kind review. I try to right about all American families, the way they used to be.
Comment from Jay Squires
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Okay, they've both seemed to have broken through the ice, Gabriel seems willing to talk about his past, but she won't let him. Doesn't she know the reader wants to know? And now, Katherine's about to open up. Although you'll have a few surprises ahead, I'm sure, let the romance begin.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
    I promise all of these questions will be answers in good time. I am doing it slowly. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Jay Squires on 15-Feb-2021
    Oh, I wouldn't speed you up for the world. I was responding to the characters as though they cared a fig for what I had to say, LOL. I have 100 percent faith in your narrative timing.
Comment from nomi338
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I love the natural way your are allowing this relationship to develop. Of importance to me is the fact that the two adults are showing a readiness to let go of the past, to accept blame for past mistakes without being bogged down with feelings of excessive guilt and regret. I foresee a very strong relationship with this couple that is not even a couple yet.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021
    I hope this to come across. Thank you for the kind review.