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Jack Frost Adieu

Potltach Poetry Challenge: The Quatern

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Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Beginning with a tentative hello to Jack Frost and finishing with a sweet goodbye makes for a good read JLR in your Quatern poem. Your repeating line works well with each verse, nicely done,
cheers.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
    Pearl thank you🙏
Comment from ESOSTINE
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What a beautiful way to capture the mixed feelings of saying goodbye to winder and welcoming springtime! The poem was well rhymed and rhythmic, and I am motivated to attempt to write one Quatern following your example. Great job!

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 01-Mar-2021
    That is great, I hope to read yours soon, thanks for the validation,
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A brilliant write! Great meter and rhymes and I loved the sentiment of spring saying goodbye to winter. You certainly have cracked the iambic meter now and there is nothing stopping you! A very pleasing poem.

Just one line out of meter here and I have a suggestion for you:

"As birds on wing, built a nest new,"

"As birds on wing, built nest anew"

Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
    Oh yes! Thank you
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 28-Feb-2021
    You are welcome, thank you for writing this treat x
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
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'Jack Frost Adieu', is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive
piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work.
I look forward to seeing your next post.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
    Hi Duchess, thanks for the review and comment.
reply by duchessofdrumborg on 28-Feb-2021
    Hi JLR, you're very welcome, the Duchess
Comment from lyenochka
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Nicely done quatern poem and we all want to bid adieu to Jack Frost. And you're right that while we welcome the joyful sounds and flora of spring, that means we will have a lot more work to do!

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
    Thank you.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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You did a great job with your challenge poem for the club. I like your topic. Your expressed your thoughts/feelings well. Your words/lines flow smoothly with good end rhymes and great imagery. I could see this as I read. I like the way you ended with the bird nest--a welcome sign that Spring must be near.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
    Jan, as always thank you for all you do for us in the club 🙏👍
Comment from Boogienights
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This is very lovely, I love the image of Jack Frost and all that he creates during winter. I'm also very glad to say goodbye to his cold antics. Very nicely written, I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing. :)

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
    You are the best! Thank you!🙏🙏
Comment from zanya
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It's a great title promising a farewell to harsher wind and weather and welcoming warmer days and a start to the growing season and new beginnings- lovely pic

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
    zanya, thanks for the review and comments.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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Your poem sings. I like eight-syllable lines and repeated first line, in each stanza. The emphasis becomes very clear.

"Invite these warm days' hoped debut,
as flora climbs slow, into view.
As birds on wing, built a nest new,
I soon bid Jack Frost sweet adieu." ... I can't wait!

Ralf




 Comment Written 27-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
    H Ralf, thank you, have a grand week!
Comment from Zoe Brown
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Very well written poem! I'm definitely ready for these cold winter days to be over and can't wait for spring! The words tie together nicely, and I enjoyed reading it. Well done!

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2021


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2021
    Zoe, thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.