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Singing While The Dawn Is Dark

Faith is like the bird singing in the dark

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Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
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This is a beautiful poem with a lovely presentation. The poem has a very special meaning.
However, if you want to win the contest, you will need to change it. Your poem has 25 words, but the syllable count is a different matter. Every individual part of a word is a syllable, for example:
"Moth-er" has two syllables
"In-di-a" has three syllables.
"Am-er-i-ca" has four syllables.
Since English isn't your first language, you probably didn't realize this. A Naani poem must have 20-25 syllables. Yours currently has about 35. By eliminating 4-6 words and possibly arranging the poem differently, you could reduce your syllable count to fit the Naani guidelines.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
    Thank you so much for the suggestion. I did not realize when I wrote this. Thank you so much for being a true friend.
reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 21-Sep-2021
    You're very welcome! I know that you didn't realize it. I hope you do well in this contest.
Comment from zanya
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What a comfort Faith can be proffering trust 'in God's eternal promise'-a lovely image in line 2 'Singing happily when the dawn is still dark'- inspirational

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
    Thank you for the kind comments, the stars and encouragement. Thank you,
Comment from RodG
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On this Sunday it was a pleasure to read your sermon expressed in four short lines. I especially like your simile comparing Faith to a singing bird at pre-dawn. Rod

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
    Thank you for the kind comments, the stars and the encouragement. Thank you,