Autumn flings down leaves
Haiku28 total reviews
Comment from Ben Colder
I wish I had a six. The photo and wording place me into the hills seeing the beautiful coloring of leaves and how God blends His colors. Thanks for sharing.
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I wish I had a six. The photo and wording place me into the hills seeing the beautiful coloring of leaves and how God blends His colors. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much especially for saying that it was six worthy
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Autumn slings down leaves", is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. Woven through each short line are the golden threads of truth.
I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"Autumn slings down leaves", is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. Woven through each short line are the golden threads of truth.
I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
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thank you very much .
You're very welcome.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this lovely, expressive haiku about autumn. Smooth inclusion of personification and to paint the scene
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You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this lovely, expressive haiku about autumn. Smooth inclusion of personification and to paint the scene
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from mermaids
I feel emotional reading your words. Your poetic form creates the feeling at the end of Autumn and Winter is beginning. "Detached trees stand still" is a wonderful last line that impacts your words.
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I feel emotional reading your words. Your poetic form creates the feeling at the end of Autumn and Winter is beginning. "Detached trees stand still" is a wonderful last line that impacts your words.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Janet Foor
Autumn is a beautiful time and the leaves do seem to dance in the breeze and fall leaving the trees standing naked and bare.
very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
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Autumn is a beautiful time and the leaves do seem to dance in the breeze and fall leaving the trees standing naked and bare.
very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and very well written haiku about autumn leaves. You used great metaphors and descriptive words with very beautiful imagery from the art work you chose, Thank you for sharing, Blessings, Teri
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This is a very beautiful and very well written haiku about autumn leaves. You used great metaphors and descriptive words with very beautiful imagery from the art work you chose, Thank you for sharing, Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from papa55mike
The skeletons of the trees exposed create mixed feelings inside. I love fall, but winter is close at hand. What a wonderfully written poem. I wish I had a six for you!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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The skeletons of the trees exposed create mixed feelings inside. I love fall, but winter is close at hand. What a wonderfully written poem. I wish I had a six for you!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
The syllable count is good and the image is nice. I especially like the "last dance" simile. The satori in the last line indicts the courage and toughness of the trees.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
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The syllable count is good and the image is nice. I especially like the "last dance" simile. The satori in the last line indicts the courage and toughness of the trees.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much
Comment from Boogienights
Isn't autumn a lovely inspirational season? There is something about the "beautiful death" of the leaves on the trees and how we understand that it's a time of change. It's my favorite time if year. Thanks for sharing. :)
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Isn't autumn a lovely inspirational season? There is something about the "beautiful death" of the leaves on the trees and how we understand that it's a time of change. It's my favorite time if year. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from DeboraDyess
Ohhh... I love the thought of 'detached trees'. Love the double meaning as the leaves fall to the ground. Detatched trees... Lovely.
The senyu is perfect. There are no corrections and no way to improve. Well done!
Blessings and thank you for sharing,
Deb
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Ohhh... I love the thought of 'detached trees'. Love the double meaning as the leaves fall to the ground. Detatched trees... Lovely.
The senyu is perfect. There are no corrections and no way to improve. Well done!
Blessings and thank you for sharing,
Deb
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you for picking that out ,.very few did .'Trees have accepted that they should let go...thanks again.