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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Carmen All Ye Faithful"
Dragon Dance Chronicles Book 2

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Comment from sandramitchell
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I loved this part, and will read the others. I really like Rozlin, she's one tough lady. So now they are going to find out who killed the family. I expect I'll learn more about them when I read the other parts. This was great, I enjoyed the banter, and the way she wouldn't give an inch to Dennis. Very enjoyable!! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 24-May-2022


reply by the author on 24-May-2022
    This tale as a whole is very dialogue heavy, so I've worked hard to try to keep the conversations interesting. I think it's working :-).

    Mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this with us. I was very pleased to read an author who knew how to write dialogue. It seems that's a rare talent. LOL. My of my reviews is correcting it. I enjoyed reading and can't wait to read more.

 Comment Written 23-May-2022


reply by the author on 24-May-2022
    Thank you, Barbara :-). When I started out, I hated writing dialogue - I used to spend all my time on dense descriptive paragraphs. Then I made myself write a few scripts to get the hang of imparting things through speech. Hopefully, things are now more balanced!

    That said, I'm feeling decidedly rusty at the moment. Hoping to sand myself smooth over the next few weeks, lol.

    Mike

    Mike
Comment from N.K. Wagner
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**********************************************Oh, I like this, Mike. Well drawn characters and a simple plot just begging for complication. Looking forward to more. :) Nancy ***************************************

 Comment Written 22-May-2022


reply by the author on 22-May-2022
    Wow - my review box is full of Nancy! Thanks so much, my friend :-). I need to start posting shorter chunks of this as I think the length is putting readers off. Trouble is, sometimes shorter chunks don't make much sense! I'm really happy you enjoyed it :-)

    Mike
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
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I am glad you decided to re-post this chapter, as I didn't read t for the contest. I hope you won. I appreciate the character descriptions. This is well written and presented. The dialogue is written in a way that reads authentically with a natural flow.

 Comment Written 21-May-2022


reply by the author on 22-May-2022
    Thank you:-). I was thoroughly beaten in the contest, but it was by the entry I voted for and a very worth winner, so no complaints. I'm really glad you enjoyed the chapter.

    Mike
Comment from John Ciarmello
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Great chapter, Mike. I believe I did read the first chapter. I love quirky writers, and you certainly have a great way with analogies. I loved it! A wonderful read. Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 21-May-2022


reply by the author on 21-May-2022
    Thank you, John :-). These characters are lots of fun to write.

    Mike
Comment from royowen
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Judy love your characters, reminds me of my friends and companions when I was a teen, growing up in a working call neighbourhood when, some of my footballing mates were a little like this bunch like the fist person protagonist too. All roughies, unshakeably unafraid, but really that could change, well done, good scribing, blessings Roy
Typo : are you saying you (are) bankrolling...

 Comment Written 21-May-2022


reply by the author on 21-May-2022
    Thank you, Roy. Their interactions are lots of fun, and that's the essence of what this story is about. Glad you enjoyed it :-)

    Mike
reply by royowen on 21-May-2022
    Yep, I know that scene
Comment from prettybluebirds
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This is a most well-written story. I love the various descriptions of Mr. Dennis's eyebrows, it adds a bit of hilarity to the story. I truly enjoyed reading this and look forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 21-May-2022


reply by the author on 21-May-2022
    Thank you :-). I do enjoy using unusual ways to distinguish characters, and the eyebrows were a handy tool here!

    Mike
Comment from Gunner Lil
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An outstanding read. Great plot. Very good flow. Excellent dialog that moves the story along keeping the reader wanting more.
Great characters, and story,
Thank you!

 Comment Written 21-May-2022


reply by the author on 21-May-2022
    Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it :-)

    Mike
Comment from Beri Bee
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Thanks! I did read chapter 1 and have been thinking about comments for it. So, this is fun to have right after. I love the last line! I've also learned some things. I am mostly working to place the characters firmly in my mind. In chapter 1 I did not have the context until about 10 paragraphs in. The word-craft is extraordinary and I love the thoughts that go on... not too much, but lots and lots. I will write more when I read them both through again. Amazing and amusing!

 Comment Written 21-May-2022


reply by the author on 21-May-2022
    Thank you, my friend :-). I know these characters well, so I have to make sure they come across instead of relying on my own knowledge! So happy you liked it :-).

    Mike