Reviews from

A Girl's Best Friend

A girl phones home

31 total reviews 
Comment from ericawrites
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This is a fantastic story, I'd have given it six stars if I could have, .... seems I'm all out of them at the moment. What an amusing, imaginative, believable piece of writing!

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2011


reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
    You're very knintaken 6 stars if I could :) Thanks for the review
Comment from robyn corum
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Fabulous! Loved it! Just the right inflections of truth and idiocy. Sounded like something I would do. You have a way of writing about the real world and then putting just the tinest spin on it. Love it.

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
    You're very kind, thanks for the review, and making me reread my old stuff to remember what it was about.
Comment from el twelve
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

that was so well written, it kept me wanting to read to see what happened, the relationship was incredibly familiar, i am a mother. the end was enjoyable.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2011


reply by the author on 17-Apr-2011
    Thanks. I'm a father, and strangely have a much closer relationship with my daughter than my wife has. You think you bring them up all the same...

    Glad you liked it
Comment from Halfree
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Got to give this a solid six. Great story and a nice ending. You led us down the path and like O. Henry you zinged us in the last sentence. Good read well done.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
    You're very kind. Thanks for your review and generous score
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This is cleverly written. I thoroughly enjoyed each and every word of it. And the ending: so cool! Thank you for the fun read and congrats on winning!

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2011
    Thank you, I'm flattered
Comment from LYLE
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Snodlander,

This is not only very well written, but what a great ending!! I had to laugh when I read her last question.,
because it is not unrealistic:) Years ago in drama school,
there was a piece that I did before the class about the man returning to his home from a trip, and being picked up by his servant. He asked about how everything went while he had been away. the answer in a nutshell was, "Fine...except for the dog dying...he chased the cat into the barn...but the bard was on fire and killed the dog.
Good God, my dog is dead and the barn was on fire. That's terrible, anything else? No Sir, but it was sad having to bury your Mrs....She died in the fire..."What was she doing
in the barn?"...She wern't in the barn, she was in her bed.
"Then how did she...?" Well a spark flew from the barn, set the house on fire and that was it...amd that's about all that happened while you was away." One by one the problems pour and pour out of the mouth of the character.
It was really a fun story.
Sincerely, Lyle

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2011
    Sounds it. Thanks for your review. Glad you got a laugh out of it
Comment from Veekz
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Congrats on your win - have just read this and can see why it took the competition! :) Your dialogue is great, very real and believable and through it you build up your characters well. Had a giggle at the below line:

"Ah, pride. Muriel checked her hair in the mirror and wondered where her daughter got it from."

Funny! :):)

Thanks for the fab little read.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2011
    Thank you for the fab little review
Comment from christian_b
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Hello there S. thank you for a lovely little storry. I loved this. particulary the fact that the note had spelling mistakes. I would have thought that the mother would know her daughters voice and vice versa however, this was still a nice twist. thanks C.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2011
    Thanks. I'm glad you liked it
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

No wonder you won! Your twist at the end was perfect.

The entire dialogue in this story is something two women have said over and over again to each other to comfort in sad times (highly) believable so when the ending came it also came with a guffaw!

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
    I'm falttered, thank you
Comment from WerdNerd
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

hahahahahaha - what a GREAT flash fiction - I'm still chuckling. Terrific build-up to a wonderful and unexpected ending! Congratulations on this gem - you made my morning.

Sandy

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2011


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
    And you've made mine. Thanks for the review