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Banshee

The way I saw lying without heart

18 total reviews 
Comment from thonnigford09
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I liked this! The banshee is one of my favorite beasties. I was saddened that she might end up in hell. I really liked that this was presented around Halloween. Thanks. well written and I would recommend this. Theresa.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2016


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2016
    you are so kind theresa for sparkling my eyes with such a heartfelt beautiful comment bless you
reply by thonnigford09 on 04-Oct-2016
    Thanks! Theresa.
reply by thonnigford09 on 04-Oct-2016
    Thanks! Theresa.
Comment from Gypsymooncat
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This was a journey, which is the only way I can describe this. I did enjoy the dark tone of it, your well chosen words, the images conjured in my mind as I read. Pain ... real, searing pain like you describe, drives the strongest of us into our own dark cave where we never sleep. Beautiful job! Thanks for sharing xoxoxox

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2016


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2016
    this was wrote at time of darkness cast down with the shadows for no good reason thank you deeply for the wonderful comment bless you
Comment from michaelcahill
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Hey! Finally got the internet back. I've got some catching up to do. This is killer. Love dark stuff like this when it is written with such skill. This was written before I got here. Amazing, this place actually managed to get along without me. Hahaha. mikey

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
    thank you so kindly mikey wonderful comment dear friend deeply appreciated smiling sure i was away for a few months myself
Comment from lindalcreel
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they say the shrill cry of a banshee is unforgettable. I used to hear my mother speak about banshee's when I was a little girl, but until I started reading fantasy, I really had no idea what she was talking about. Now, I have a better idea. Great poem!

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
    thank you kindly heartfelt beautiful comment yeah she follows certain families dear friend deeply appreciated god bless
reply by lindalcreel on 07-Sep-2014
    My pleasure:)
Comment from Barry70
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A very interesting piece.
Not the type work I normally read but there's a quality about it that interests me. I read it twice. Something I often do when a piece is more than just a message.
I must say I am not sure if I took from it what you put into it but I did enjoy it.
Thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
    Thank you for the lovely comment greatly appreciated
Comment from CR Delport
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As I read through this well written poem, it actually made the hairs on the back of my neck stand on end. This is well written. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
    thank you so kindly wonderful comment thank you kindly deeply appreciated
Comment from DiamondGirlz61
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Very nice in your depiction of good and evil! The glow of the poem was excellent. You did a very good job with your words here too!

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
    thank you ever so much for your beautiful comment greatly appreciated
Comment from Maureen's Pen
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Darkhorse, You always impress me with your darker imagery. I know many see the darker emotions penned as a negative - I don't.
Though this work sure has a deeper nightmarish release it also holds pockets of hope and light.

Just a really well penned work beautiful in its stark frigid reality.

Suggestion:

"Let me see white
My soul covers my heart in white" // Can you use a different word for white? You have it twice in connected lines. Would "light" work? Or "white light" ?

Also I loved:

"My soul passes the graveyard of life "// Love this line:)

Thanks for sharing my friend.
Maureen

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
    that for me a heartfelt amazing comment maureen thank you ever so much for your time greatly appreciated
Comment from zeldasmith
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I think this would be easier to read if it rhymed throughout. I didn't particularly like it but that doesn't mean it was badly written. My son would probably like it. He writes dark poems. I gave you three stars for effort. If you can re write it so it rhymes, let me know. I'm just an old fogey who can't get into dark stuff. Sorry.




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 Comment Written 15-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
    thank you for your average comment
reply by zeldasmith on 16-Jun-2013
    I'm sorry. I wasn't trying to be mean. I was just grading it as to what I got out of it when I read it. After I read yours I decided to pass up the dark side of poems since I really can't get into them and I didn't want to give another writer an unfair rating. This is my first time reviewing and rating. I'm sorry you had to
    Write the first poem I viewed I couldn't connect to. If I can't connect to words written in poetry or prose then I usually get turned off. I'm sure you are a good writer...just not my cup of tea. You probably wouldn't like my genre either. keep on writing.
Comment from Curt Winslow
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This is a spooky story, very eerie. If you don't believe me, read it at a kids campfire one night. Hell, read it at a PTA meeting..lol. Great job!

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
    thank you ever so much a wonderful comment greatly appreciated