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The Devil's Skin

Stranger danger...

96 total reviews 
Comment from F. Wehr3
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Good stuff, Dean. I enjoyed your poem. The second half was more fixated on the real life monsters that roam the realm of men. It got me thinking of your Harry Poppins story. I wonder if your going to dabble back into his dark world again.

Take care,
Russell

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
    Thanks very much for reading, Russell.
    All the best.
    ~Dean
Comment from Kingsland
Exceptional
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Enter the sandman, whoops there goes the neighborhood. This poem has it all going in the right direction for being an exceptional piece of poetic art. It is easy to read and flows so smoothly from line to line. I'm positive that ole Edgar Allan Poe would say to you, well done poet, well done... John

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2016

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I loved the rhythm and the rhyming pattern of this poem. You make excellent use of imagery and create a very strong story. I enjoyed reading your poem very much. It was quite scary.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read my work, choice.
    I sincerely appreciate your feedback and insight.
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Comment from Domino 2
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Hi, Dean. Generally excellent meter, plus top unforced internal and external rhymes.

Right, here's the nit-picking. Please, please don't ever take it personally or be offended when I do so, as you only have to check my other reviews to see I do it with everyone, including my friends on here. After all, we all get loads of compliments from kind writers, so I think a more constructive critique should be useful - though of course I don't expect everyone to always agree with my points.

This reads like TWO poetic themes joined in the middle, though there is a loose connection.

I found, 'ZOMB-ies', 'MON-sters' and, 'FRIGHT-ning' started those lines with emphasised syllables which broke the pattern of the otherwise iambic meter.

Of course, no one in their right mind could disagree with your comments on child-abusing scumbags, which you convey very eloquently and poetically. Excellent point too about some 'do-gooders' (though I agree with many Liberal outlooks) who maybe wouldn't be so forgiving if the rotten crimes were 'closer to home'.

TOP poem.

Cheers, Ray.


 Comment Written 30-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
    Thanks so much for taking the time yet again to read my work, Ray.
    I sincerely appreciate your feedback and insight.
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reply by Domino 2 on 30-Aug-2016
    Thanks for your gracious reply, Dean. I assume it's OK for me to continue nit-picking then. ;-) Ray.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
    Sure, absolutely, Ray.
    Nit-pic until your heart's content, sir.
    Cheers
    ~Dean
reply by Domino 2 on 30-Aug-2016

    I keep telling myself to write shorter less detailed reviews that take a quarter of the time, but if I see something I THINK needs improving, I can't help myself pointing it out. Cheers, Ray.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
    That's good, not everyone takes the time required to do that.
    It's very helpful, at times.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Unfortunately the laws of our land seem to protect the perverts more than they do the victims, out early on parole and creating more horror for their victims. A good strong write Dean, indeed many do - don the devil's skin. Great work,
cheers,
valda.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
    Thanks so much for taking the time yet again to read my work, Pearl.
    I sincerely appreciate your feedback and insight.
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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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Chilling and right to the point! You don't pull any punches in this poem, as well you shouldn't. I can't imagine every reading a discourse so compelling about child sexual abuse. You've just beaten them to a pulp with your words, and good for you!! Telling them off with style and punch.

Two sixes in one day, probably for the first time from me, but well deserved.

Great job,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
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No fears the ones in there for marijuana will serve their full sentence out. I'm still a bit irritated that mine never even seen hand cuffs. I'm not good at writing this dark and twisted stuff but oh how I wish I was. I could write some good stuff if I could. Great job

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
    Thanks so much for taking the time yet again to read my work, Meghan.
    I sincerely appreciate your feedback and insight.
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
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When I saw this I just couldn't resist reading, Dean. I think it is a great contribution towards making people aware of how ridiculous it is trying to rehabilitate these criminals who have no intention of changing. Perhaps this should be played in the court room! Giddy

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Wouldn't that be somethin', Giddy?
    It'll never happen, though. We have become far too politically correct to torment poor pedophiles in such a manner.
    According to justice, they have rights too.
    As far as I'm concerned, their rights to justice ended they day they placed their filthy hands on a child.
    Thank you for giving this a chance, despite the rather unsettling artwork.
    I appreciate your comments and very generous six stars very much.
    Take care, and thanks again for reading.
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Comment from Delahay
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I kind of like the idea of the millstone around the neck and the splash, except I believe that is too kind. It would be over much too soon. I think there have been quite a few studies conducted that prove such people can never be rehabilitated. I don't know what molds the type of mind that is capable of such horrors, or is it that some people are just born twisted?

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Wouldn't it be great if we could do somethin' like that, Delahay?
    It'll never happen, though. We have become far too politically correct to torment poor pedophiles in such a manner.
    According to justice, they have rights too.
    As far as I'm concerned, their rights to justice ended they day they placed their filthy hands on a child.
    Thank you for giving this a chance, despite the rather unsettling artwork.
    I appreciate your comments and very generous six stars very much.
    Take care, and thanks again for reading.
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Comment from jack silver
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I have no love for those kinds of people either. It almost happened to me when I was younger though I didn't actually realize it till a a picture of the person appeared on the news. And just a couple of months ago I stopped a man from getting to touchy with some girls after he said some things which made me realize what was going on. I made him get off the bus after bring it all to the bus drivers attention. At the next bus stop some of the guys got off and started to walk back towards him. I hope they gave him a good going over! The girls thanked me for my help and pretending to know them. As well as getting the bus driver to boot the guy off the bus.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Thanks so much for reading, Jack.
    We have become far too politically correct to torment poor pedophiles.
    According to justice, they have rights too.
    As far as I'm concerned, their rights to justice ended they day they placed their filthy hands on a child.
    Thank you for giving this a chance, despite the rather unsettling artwork.
    I appreciate your comments and very generous six stars very much.
    Take care, and thanks again for reading.
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reply by jack silver on 29-Aug-2016
    No probs