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The Devil's Skin

Stranger danger...

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Comment from Father Flaps
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Wow! Dean, this is a terrific poem, one of your very best. I enjoyed it the whole way through. And I wouldn't dare touch it with suggestions, though suggestions are my delight. I love the inner rhyme of almost every line. You nail child molesters to walls of Hades. And I agree, that's exactly where they belong.
So many great lines, but here are my favorites of each verse:
"Oh, how I long to thrill the throngs with poetic flights of fancy." ... double the alliteration, bravo!
"Romance is not the thing for me, it doesn't make me quiver." ...and so many posts in here are about love and romance, it nearly makes me sick.
"It's darker, deeper eerie creeps that cause me perspiration." ...love the assonance here.
"Near schoolhouse yards, they play their cards with careful calculation" ...you present quite an image here, Dean, and some perfect alliteration with "c" too.
"Foul fiendish freaks, sad twisted geeks, whose mental masturbation" ... inner rhymes of "freaks/geeks", the alliteration of "foul fiendish freaks" and "mental masturbation". "mental masturbation" is a brilliant phrase, the best in the poem.
"Yet they're the worst, the very first, to don the devils skin." ... what a great way to end the poem! It's sad to think that even Satan would pick on a child. But he is the source of evil. Molesters don his skin, as you so aptly put it.
I like your style, Dean. You're #1 in my books!
Have a great day!
cheers
Kimbob

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016

Comment from MissMerri
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Well written, and scary too, but not as scary as your author notes. Thank you for bringing these things to our attention. It truly is a serious and sick crime to abuse the innocent in this way and I wonder why there is so much of this going on. It is truly sad! The poem is excellent and the rhymes and meter are perfectly accomplished. The word choices are creative and clever. I can find nothing to change.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016

Comment from jlsavell
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Dean, your poetic voice is loud and stark. You have captured the diabolical state of an absolutely evil being. The one who perpetrates their very being on the flesh and emotions of helplessness. I have no room for forgiveness or believing their rehabilitation in my heart, no room. well said friend.. now you go take on the day!!!! jimi

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Thanks very much for taking the time to read and comment, Jimi.
    I appreciate it.
    ~Dean
reply by jlsavell on 28-Aug-2016
    No, thank you!
    Do you ever get so behind in answering reviews, reviewing and writing along with life? It's overwhelming. Is it for you also?
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Oh yes. You bet it is! :)
Comment from GE Parson
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My good friend,
This is one of the best, If not THE best
warning to child abusers. I personally am well acquainted
with two of them; one to whom I was his pastor for about 10 yrs. and the other a relative on my wife's side. Both of them I would never in a million years have thought they
would be guilty of such a vile act.

I am in complete agreement with you about rehabilitating
any of them who have one tasted the pleasure of
child abuse; that craving never dissipates from their
palate

Having said that I am reminded of Jer.17:9 As the saying
goes "But for the Grace of God.....

MARANATHA!!!
YBIC - Jerry

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016

Comment from krys123
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Hello Dean;
-another very enjoyable piece of reading that is very well written expertise skill of two topics and that are quite different from each other. One is explained in the first three verses while the other one is written in the last three verses.
-Superbly written rhyming and rhythm which helps with the readings fluidity throughout the writing and the reading of the poem.
-For the two different topics the enjambment is really well written and understood throughout each of the two sections. Good enjambment in the first three verses as well as in the last three verses.
-The first three verses have an imagery that of self-expression within eerie imagery that is explained through various designs that implement the understanding of the writer biography. The last three verses has an imagery that explains and describes and definitely expresses the horrible aspects of a child molester.
-The two pictures used of a devil's head and a child's doll looking had that is cracked a very supportive but also very relative to the conceptual theme and topic of the writing.
-I ponder on the thought of why the author explains his relevancy in a biography of himself to prepare the reader for the last three verses that speak of a child molester's relevancy to the authors biography. Or is very prepares the reader of why the author wrote such a topic in the last three verses. I myself may not necessary for the first three verses to be used in this writing that are just an opinionated hypotheses.
-Thanks for sharing Dean and take care and have a good one my friend.
Alex
-PS: Well; regulation them winning the poem of the month and I guess you can't really say never won a major acceptance winning a major contest and also congratulations on winning unrequited 5/7/5 syllabic formatted contest.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Thanks very much for taking the time to read and comment, Alex.
    I appreciate it as always.
    ~Dean
reply by krys123 on 29-Aug-2016
    You are very welcome Dean and take care and have a good one my friend.
    Alex
Comment from Pantygynt
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The reason for the high rate of recidivism in this are is I feel sure down to psychological maladjustment rather than a criminal propensity. Treatment for these individuals rather than punishment is the only thing likely to change behaviour in the long run however, this must not be allowed to lead to victims being put at risk, consequently secure hospitals are probably the answer and sentences should not be handed down in a punitive way but last only until a cure is effected. I fully realise that in some cases this my not be achieved in the lifetime of the perpetrator.

Written in quatrains of rhyming couplets in iambic heptameter with and intriguing number of feminine endings, this makes chilling reading.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Thanks very much for taking the time to read and comment, 'Gynt.
    I appreciate it as always.
Comment from Stephanie Kastner
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I agree. Anyone who takes advantage of an innocent child sexually should have to pay a deep price. It does not seem that rehabilitation in most cases prevents them from preying on the innocent again. It is a deep, deep illness. Unfortunately, too many people have suffered.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016

Comment from Caressa_08
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I read this without that horrid music, and then everything, I felt was OK with me being able then to concentrate on your poem, which is written in a way, I felt are yes, they're monsters, and they are here. And they do prey on children and seem to wear the skin of the devil, and really in every walk of life..so many out there... and even teachers who abuse sexually even their own students... I really believe, besides, the wearer of the devil's skin, their cursed and I would think half of these people were abused themselves as children by those they trusted...though no excuse. And children abused in this manner should be given some adequate mental help intervention immediately and maybe schools could set up where kids are encouraged to speak up about this if they are Offenders of more than even a few crimes as this... should be locked up forever more, as they are habitual ...without it would seem any recourse. Though be analyzed and maybe best be send to an outcast place to live forever and do constructive labor, as making license plates, etc..And to be making a wage to pay for their living that way...entirely.... as our current prisons are overflowing, and tax payers are forever paying out to keep the bad guys locked away with the murderers.....Really I believe most prisoners who commit crimes are mentally ill.

World-wide, be it in Indonesia or other foreign places, it is so unreal how children are mistreated in this manner....And really a lot is a generational sin overseas, and more behind closed door here, though it is here in the US...Yes, this mortal sin is everywhere and rabid, unfortunately.

Thanks for sharing, though I think it would of been a lot better without any audio..Caressa_08

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Thanks very much for taking the time to read and comment, Caressa.
    I appreciate it as always.
    ~Dean
Comment from Bollie
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This is a very ingenious and thought provoking poem that captivated my attention throughout. The rhyming is perfect and unforced, each one emphasizes the message. Really great job, Dean.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016

Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written and revealing poem. We should be more scared of the evil ones amongst us than we scare the unseen 'ghosts' who are not able to do as much harm as children molesters.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2016


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
    Thanks very much for taking the time to read and comment, Sandra.
    I appreciate it as always.
    ~Dean