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Brave Boys of Normandy

A Pantygynt poem: In Rememberance...

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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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The first thing I noticed was the baby boy face in the middle of the first picture. He looks very young, as do the other young men in the picture, so sad.

The sound made me feel like I was in the middle of a war. The sound scared the xxx out of me but it's effective. It adds to the whole realistic effect .. sorround sound.

I like the iambic meter, it made me feel like I was dancing ... amazing rhythm.

I watched a lot of war movies when I was little, and the ones about concentration camps and Nazis were my favorite. I like the end when the Americans came to the rescue. But this poem is about Normandy with the British, French, Canadian, and Americans.

The pictures are amazing! Good job, honey. This made me so sad.

Gypsy

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2016

Comment from michaelcahill
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This was soooo moving, Dean. Truly one of your best. All the elements come together perfectly I think.

The war did end--we went back home,
to shattered hopes and dreams.
Still, I return to red soaked loam,
my soul's still there, it seems.

WONDERFUL and timeless words there. Those are words we poets envy in the best way. Perfection.

I had a couple thoughts, I don't even know if I'd call them suggestions.

Now Hitler's Third Reich is no more (was thinking "nightmare" instead of "Third Reich". Can't say it's better though.)

Our LCPs soon hit the shore (you could say "landing craft" and it would fit for us term-challenged. Not a big deal as I knew exactly what it was. Just a passing thought.)

Loved this a lot, Dean. Well done. mikey

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2016


reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    Thanks very much for taking the time to read this, Mike, and I appreciate those suggestions as well.
    I'm really glad that you enjoyed reading this poeced.
    As always, I appreciate your very valuable feedback.
    It means a great deal to me.
    Thanks so much again.
    Enjoy your weekend!
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Comment from pharp
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Dean,

What an awesome job you have done in the penning of this tribute in honoring the many who fought and died in this battle. A powerful presentation that brought tears to my eyes. You never cease to amaze me my friend, you are so talented and should go very far with this gift God have blessed you with. Outstanding job Dean!
Blessings..............Portia

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2016


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
    Thanks, Portia.
    I appreciate your kind comments.
    Take care,
    ~Dean
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Fabulous presentation for Remembrance Day Dean and a lovely, emotional Pantygynt poem about the Battle of Normandy.So many, in all the wars, are - still haunted by the screams.
Well done Dean,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2016

Comment from krys123
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Hello Dean and Buckeye man;
-I really enjoyed your writing that is really befitting whether Memorial holiday and remembrance of all those veterans who live and who died for our freedom.
-The totality of your composition was fantastically created piece by piece with the pictures and the words that went hand-in-hand like a glove is to a hand,
-as I read along your poem so smoothly and fluidly because of the well-written techniques and rhyming in rhythm I realized how the intensity of the Normandy invasion cost many men their lives.
-Thanks for a very entertaining read and take care and have a good one and go buckeyes.
Alex

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2016


reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
    Thanks for reading, Alex.
    I appreciate your comments, as always.
    Enjoy your Saturday.
    ~Dean
reply by krys123 on 17-Nov-2016
    You are so superiorly welcome, Dean, and take care and have a good one my friend.
    Alex
Comment from JTStone
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Outstanding Poem, Dean!
As you know, I know nothing about meter, being American I could care less about metric. I love the way this poem inches along.
It was a powerful statement about a heroically tragic day. A well penned honor to those both fallen and surviving.
Awesome my friend.
Jimmy

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2016

Comment from Linda Kay
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What a wonderful tribute to those brace men who we sometimes forget were just boys at the time, and are now a dying breed. Dean, this really should be published somewhere, it blends horrific description, honest emotion, and history perfectly.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2016

Comment from Kooky Clown
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I am so pleased that you wrote this poem about the brave very brave American soldiers and others who helped Britain to overcome the Nazis during the second world war. I found this a very moving poem and well written thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2016

Comment from Chrissy710
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Hi Dean You say thank you as always for reading , how can one not read your work you never cease to amaze me with your poetic skills. What a lovely tribute to this Normandy Battle ( like all battles so many young lives lost a cirse of war) I loved this style and your poem was well constructed and met the pantygynt criteria.Your opening line was excellent and set the meter nicely .Loved it Cheers Christne

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2016

Comment from Sis Cat
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Dean, this is a fine tribute to those brave men and women who served in the Armed Forces. I love your use of narration and dialogue to tell the story of the Brave Boys of Normandy. Although using a structure Pantygynt form, I love how you offset the fourth line in many of the stanzas. This gave it a feeling of free verse. It also pivots the reader's focus from the rhymes to the story you are telling. The way you structured the Pantygynt evokes the chaos of war.

You end on a strong note when a veteran, "still haunted by the screams," returns "to red soaked loam,/ my soul's still there, it seems."

Thank you for sharing your tribute and remembering those who fought in the Armed Forces.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2016


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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