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A Halloween with Stephen King

A Halloween Poem Contest Entry

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Comment from fastdigits
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A absolutely delightful poetry, dressed in artistic poetically rhyming words that take the reader down the page of all the holidays in a whimsical and humorous vein much like some Disney delight of long ago
Well done and good luck

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

Comment from Angela VA
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Your poem was fun and you thought it through well. Once I got to the animations though, I couldn't focus on the poem. I had to go to my computer setting and turn off the sound to be able to read the words without distraction. My advice would be to include a few still pictures but don't overdo it. I enjoyed your fun poem.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Once again you nailed the contest again, WOW!!! How do you continually do this? I remember as a child Halloween was fun, but back in the day everybody made homemade goodies to pass out. In today's world it's not allowed. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

Comment from robina1978
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Great pictures and a good writer to choose for writing about Halloween. They match so perfectly. It rhymes and flows well too. Nice fact for a contest. Best wishes for it.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

Comment from Brigitte Elko
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This Halloween poem is best that I have ever had the pleasure to read. The pictures and imagery are absolutely perfect. Stephen King added to the poem was a meaningful addition. I want to read this over and over again! The vividness of descriptions are perfect in a metaphorical way. Comparing holidays was definitely unique. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

Comment from nomi338
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You sly, slick devil you. You took a holiday that is distasteful to some religious people and you removed the claws, the decay of rotting flesh, the deep and dark forbidden mystery of it all and made fun of it in such a way that to be in fear of it still made the fearful one look foolish and needlessly stern and fearful. Good job.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

Comment from Pantygynt
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This is the first of the halloween poems I have seen this year and, for originality will take some beating. The idea of all the festivals quarrelling over which of them is the most important is a brilliant subject for a fun piece of poetry.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

Comment from sandramitchell
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That was so good, Dean, Steven King would be so proud. It is fun, Halloween puts smiles on the children's faces, which in turn, keeps the real ghoulies away. They hate children that smile!! Superb contest entry, my friend. Good luck! :) sandra xx

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

Comment from Father Flaps
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Hi Deano
Wow! I really enjoyed your entry for the Halloween contest. You use personification on our special days of the year. Of course, Halloween is the star. Wonderful presentation, especially with the addition of the co-star, Stephen King. (Although, he's ruined the livelihood of thousands of clowns across our countries.)
I like the opening line,
"Easter and Christmas were chatting away"
and then a nice simile for Halloween, who we feel sorry for right off the bat:
"Poor Halloween, she just watched from afar,
feeling so lost, like a bug in a jar."

a tiny suggestion,
"She gave kids in Fall such great things to do." ...("kids in Fall" seems a bit awkward to me. What do you think of,
She gave trick-or-treaters such great things to do.)

Some nice alliteration in this line,
"Old graveyards and ghouls--gaunt ghosts are your thing."

I like the imagery in this line, Thanksgiving just having finished his huge turkey plate,
"Thanksgiving belched then soon started to snore." ... (but I think you should add a comma or semi-colon after "belched")

Cool rhyme here, patois noted, of course:
"ALL of us matter," she shouted in anger.
Stephen King watched from his Mansion in Bangor."

I found this line a bit awkward too,
"Here, put these on," the King of horror ordered." ... (can I suggest?
"Here, put these on," the Horror King ordered.)

Again with cool rhymes,
"Once the holidays had donned their disguises
they went trick -or- treating; joy spread like a virus." ...(would this be any better?
Once all of the holidays donned their disguises
they went trick-or-treating, joy spreading like viruses.)

I like the parallel of Halloween (cheer) and Christmas (cheer) in your closing verse. It almost makes you want to declare, "God Bless Us, everyone!"

Well done!!

Thanks for sharing with us.

cheers,
Kimbob







 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

Comment from rjuselius
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Lol. This is a fun entry for this particular contest dear dean! I like the way you introduce all holidays and give them an identity for each one. And it's kind of like Rudolph the red nosed reindeer who wasn't accepted at once.
Bravo my friend!
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017