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Haiku

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Comment from countess gram
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This is a great Haiku. To me it has a melancholy feel,not in a sad way but a reflective way. The structure is sound and it flows well. There is also good imagery for a short poem. Well done!!

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much.
Comment from Insider98
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What a great analogy. Just like a leaf, one day, it will be everyones turn to get detached. Extremely powerful, especially the last line. Excellent job!

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much.
Comment from susand3022
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A very nice analogy between fall and the later time in someone's life. Nicely stated. Though i love the season i have way too many leaves in my yard just now. Want to rake? ???

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2018


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    Thank you very much.
Comment from jenintorre
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This is an excellent Haiku. The last line is a killer, it really got to me as I am nearing that time too. Very well chosen artwork. Best wishes. Jen.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much.
Comment from country ranch writer
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Nice work up for your poem and Autumn has come and gone just about all the leaves have become to their demise. Soon to become fertilizer for next years trees to grow big and strong.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
    True. Thank you very much.
Comment from kiwijenny
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I felt this poem deeply. I'm in the fall of life...still clinging to the tree. But I'm probably more orange than green.. the seasons are a metaphor for our life.
Well penned haiku
Fighting though
God bless

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much.
Comment from DonandVicki
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Very well said, we all have an alpha and omega clock that ticks inside of us and only God knows the hour that we are destined to come home. Well written Don and Vicki

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written haiku and the comparison of the fallen leaves in autumn and human lives that come to an end one or other time. We often think our lives are shorter than we want.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much.
Comment from estory
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This haiku had it all; nice balance, nature image, and that epiphany moment that connects the contemplation of nature to the human experience, in this case, mortality and the bracketing borders of time. Nice work, and I hope you continue to explore the format. Push the language into a little more gracefulness, try to push the images into more color, vibrancy, poignancy. One step at a time. estory

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much. Thanks for the encouragement.
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Terrific imagery. As the leaf flies/falls to the ground, in that moment, it gets detached from its worldly heights. Your Autumn scene just makes me feel so 'orangy.' Good use of that background color. BTW .... I see a tree-like structure in your leaf's veins.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
    Thank you very much.