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Success In Life

We all search for it-sonnet

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Comment from Gloria ....
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Just so beautiful Jay. Your elegant eloquence shines through clearly with the strong message money, power, rank and fame are for the most part yield a lousy return on investment.

Your metre and rhymes are supreme and I thank you for sharing today. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Darkhorse555
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success in life is a hard task master, where happiness holds all the virtues your pen sang in its contents ending with a very peaceful smile very beautifully painted piece

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Darlene Franklin
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What a well put sonnet on what success truly means. Well done on the meter and rhyme of the sonnet. I love the stanza that begins success in life depends on how you live.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from royowen
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I often wondered what defines the word "success". Some would explain it as material wealth, making money, or being good looking, and talented enough to be a movie star, or simply being a loving father or mother, and raising kids to be the same. I know many such humanitarians who make their mark and impression on others, one doesn't need to be talented or good looking to be selfless. Beautifully written, an immaculate sonnet poem, well done my friend, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This is well constructed. The rhyme is seamlessly executed and flows naturally from line to line. The meter is rhythmic and fluid allowing this to sound wonderful when read aloud. The advice offered - profound and life sustaining. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is a fine sonnet and I loved the sentiments here, you can't take these worldly goods with you and it is what we leave behind that counts and embers of a good life lived, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Hitcher
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Success is different for us all, but many like you eloquently expressed seek power, wealth and fame and measure their success that way. A sad way of thinking unfortunately. To love, be loved and be content with life should be enough. Nice sonnet Jay : )

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Sugarray77
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This is so beautifully written, Jay. I take to heart the lesson you are teaching about not letting worldly things become too important and suffocating. Thank you.

Melissa

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Coco Jane
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Good advice for everyone, as we sometimes forget what's important in life.

Consider capitalizing every line for uniformity.

In line 13, do you mean "every" instead of "ever"?

I especially like "Greed is the scourge..."--great image there.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Diana L Crawford
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very cool poem! if i had money, i'd be spending it all on my loved ones. that's what life is all about. hoarding it only causes the greed to have more and more! i get by pretty good and still share all I have. (i do have some retirement set aside since I have to take care of me too), but the feeling of sharing and doing things with and for my family is priceless! :) xoxo

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019