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Success In Life

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Comment from DonandVicki
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A sonnet that gives the reader a life's lesson. I have tried to write sonnets before but I never can get the thing to sound not forced. At seventy one i have discovered that getting this far is success enough for me.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Gypsymooncat
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The world is a pretty sad place these days, as most keep on treading that treadmill of wanting more things, more success, more money...I wonder when we'll ever get back to basics and learn to value the basic essence of life rather than adornments.

I thought your poem was not only excellent for its message, but the structure of a sonnet was executed really well here, and I found no hiccups or rough patches - it just flowed along. Well done!

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Reading Ray Ray
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Jaybird this is fantastic! I love how the flow of it is and the first 2 lines really set the tone of your message. And a great message at that! Wisdom that applies universally.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! I am looking forward to reading more of your creations.
Blessings,

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I enjoyed your poem, Jay. Your lines read well with great rhymes. This is super advice for anyone. Money, although necessary, doesn't make a person. It is, as you say, the way the person acts towards others--not what money can but which is just for show. true action are worth more than money. Your poem reads like a prayer. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Admiration. Jan

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Susan Larson
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Excellent message. I agree with all you say. A few technicalities I'd like to mention. Power, rank game - omit one of these to make it flow and becomes should be become. I really like your ending.

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 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hello jaybird. This is an excellent rhyme didn't metered poem discussing the priorities of life. You list several options of how people live their lives and that the final choice is really what affects the quality of the life they lived. Robert

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Sallyo
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Your pieces never fail to me impress
Your rhyme perfection, but I do digress...
Lovely piece, which works as a homily as well as a poem. Looking forward to another masterpiece from the master.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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With your wisdom, I'm sure you have reached a profound success. I love your poetry; it is so full of delicate phrases with meaningful messages.
It is so comforting.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from Raul1
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Happiness is all that counts. I like this poem. It has hope for some people who need it. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good job!

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019

Comment from karenina
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You've done it again! Left me smiling and nodding my sincere affirmation of your poetic wisdom! Woe to those who count their wealth in earthly currency! It won't buy them a moment's grace in heaven!--Karenina

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2019