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A Pecular Man I Am

On my life journey I seldom chose to be a loner. That acco

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Comment from PLAIN1
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I gave this five stars because you used the industry of food, very provocative, in that I am shocked that anyone could put such a poetic spin on that subject. You've got me thinking about critiquing, if not weighing, the dynasty of 'eat this'. There has to be a place of accountability of such, not just acceptance. Okay, Donald, now I have to read the poem again to delve deeper. Here's to love in Christ.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
    Plain 1, you are gracious in your encouraging comments. Thanks.

    Don
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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If in choosing to be different makes me a peculiar nut,
My odd examples matter little on a planet gone astray,

Good for you! I happen to prefer peculiar nuts. There are so many sheep on the planet we could use a few minds that think for themselves. :)

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2019

Comment from Sallyo
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So, you chose to write rhymed poetry that feels like free verse. Yes, why not? It made me read carefully, as if listening to a conversation in an accent I'm not very familiar with. The way food gave way to socks (or trousers), returned to groceries and then to thoughts of the morals and soul... interesting traipse through your brain, sir.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
    That's a keen analysis you make of my traipsinf.






    going from food, to socks, clothes, than back to morals. I guess you size me up in my wandering subjects.
    It did occur to me my thoughts might be incoherent.

    Thanks, Sallye, for your candid comments.
Comment from royowen
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By nature I'm a contrarian, not because I want to be, I'd rather be a person who fits in, but with all modesty, most viewpoints are influenced. Well done, you said more about yourself than most do, you are self aware, writing always tends to define us more readily than appearance, because of the absence. Beautifully written, great language, with lots of words, but you only said what you want heard, well done, good scribing, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
    Hi, Roy. I learn from you, especially the way you engage in psychology regarding injecting myself in my writing. Perhaps you also engage some philosophy.
    It did occur to me I was stressing personal matters, or writing from POV (Personal Point of View)/

    In any case, you credit me for good writing. Thanks.
reply by royowen on 28-Sep-2019
    Bless you
Comment from Pantygynt
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This is a weird piece of poetry as far as content is concerned but quite modern and acceptable when considering form. The lack of any kind of rhythmic approach is a modern isea that flees from classical metre and also from syllabic rhythm. As a result it does not flow smoothly but that may well be your intent.

I find nothing that merits an apology here concerning your rhyme scheme as I like slant rhymes and there are plenty of really clever ones here.

I came upon one typo, as shown here:

'It might appeal to causal observers, ...' I think you mean 'casual rather than causal'.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
    Yes, Pantykvrt, you state it professionally about my erratic metre and staggered rhyme.
    Thanks for catching my misspelling, rather, wrong choice of word causal, rather then the proper word casual. Thanks.
    Don
Comment from Mistydawn
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I enjoyed this little poem. Glad I came back to it, Your problem sounds like Evil Eddie's doing. Darn editing monster. Your poem is well-written, very interesting, relatable. I often question the so-called norm. Guess you can say I'm not a one size fits all kinda gal. Live and let live, to each their own is more of my motto. If that makes me odd, oh well.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
    Yes, I contacted Tom Ens, trouble shooter, about my wild choice of colors and background. When I reviewed it myself, it looked like a blank page.

    So, after Tom's reply, I resent it. I think you might review it again. Perhaps you can better evaluate it.

    Don
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Hey there, Don -- seems you've been bitten by the gnome editor in that your text is exactly the same color as the back ground (or there's nothing there at all) because all we've got is a grey rectangle.... let me know when it's fixed and I'll happily update my review/rating! :) :)

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
    Yes, Y. M. Roger, I contacted Tom Ens, the trouble shooter for FanStory.
    From his reply, I sent it again. You might try reviewing again. It seems readable now. Thanks for your trouble.

    Don