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God is Love

2-10-2 Poem

8 total reviews 
Comment from __Lou__
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Hi there.

Firstly, the rhythm of this is kind of jarring just because of the placement of words, it doesn't flow very smoothly as it might if you had ended the second line at 'truly' (ignoring syllables for a second). Paying attention to rhythm is really important in these short poems, and you must also be mindful of pauses between sentences. Being able to find the appropriate words that also fit into the desired syllable count and manage to keep the rhythm is one of the harder things with short poems like this.

I think this is a good entry and has a good chance of placing simply because of the subject matter. I do feel you need to put a comma after 'eternal' though (love eternal, for we are...etc). Good luck in the competition!

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019
    Thank you! I have fixed the mistake. You can check it out again. I'm happy that you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Gloria ....
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Author this is a fine entry into this contest. You have illustrated your faith in just a few syllables.

My only suggestion is to use black font lettering as your choice of colour is difficult to read.

Great job and best of luck to you in the booth. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 27-Nov-2019
    Thank you! Thanks for the advice! I'm so happy that you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the 2-10-2 writing prompt.
The spiritual message is well painted in your few words.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
    Thanks! I'm so happy that you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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A strong statement of one's faith and a well-written offering for the 2-10-2 contest... :) ;) Thank you so much for sharing and best of luck to you at the polls! ;)

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
    Thanks! I'm so happy that you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Michael McCottry Bell Jr
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I like how you wrote "his bliss" in the way the context of the poem was constructed. I wish you the best of luck in the contest and that is a wonderful image that you have chosen


Mike

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
    Thanks! I'm so happy that you enjoyed my poem! Thanks for the good luck wishes!
Comment from rspoet
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You've written an excellent 2-10-2 poem for the contest
that many on fanstory will relate to
Excellent picture to match your words
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
Robert

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
    Thanks! I'm so happy that you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Supe
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Nicely done. The 10 words is a challenge I am sure, but you mastered it here. I love the picture, but the printing was a little hard for me. The colour didn't work well with my glasses. Maybe it is just me. Good luck in the contest. You did a nice job.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
    Thanks! I'm so happy that you enjoyed my poem!
reply by Supe on 26-Nov-2019
    you are welcome.
Comment from Earl Corp
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Wow! In 14 syllables you hit three of the four criteria I use to rate poetry. It rhymed, made sense, and is spiritual. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2019


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2019
    Thanks! I'm so happy that you enjoyed my poem! Thanks for the encouragement!