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The Pen I hold

A wasted talent...or a person of worth?

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Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Never dreamt of being a poet;
Never aspired to be a writer - yes I can relate to that. I hated school and didn't take to writing of any sort till my children were grown, but now I don't know what I'd do without my writing. I enjoyed your quatrain about taking up the challenge of your talent for words.
cheers.

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
    Exactly! Same here as well! And now, this is my main hobby/activity and I plan on seeing it through that how far I can manage to take it! Its probably my best skill and I must give it the proper time and attention it needs.
    Thank you so much for reading back on my work! You are too kind!
Comment from Farwa Masood Qazi
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Wow! It is such a beautiful poetry and I really enjoyed reading it. It contains a wonderful message and can inspire many. I think you would be able to set your own mark if you would follow your heart because I feel poetry comes in heart first and then it flows. I've read your other pieces of writing as well but this one is best. Keep your spirit and the pen that you're holding high. Wishing you Luck!

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2020
    Awwww thank you soooo much Farwa for such high praise and encouragement! You are too kind to read the rest of my work as well! I will try my best to uphold my standards according to your expectations!
    Might I suggest using Farwa_M_Qazi as your own pen-name? It really has a nice ring to it! ;-)
Comment from susand3022
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Oh Geez, Aaqib... you sound quite like me... lol I've worked in all kinds of things, but always had this kind of floating in the back of my brain somewhere. Whenever I was upset, I always wrote it out. Some people yell some hold it in... I just write it out... then I yell... when the dam breaks. LOL But I've done everything from housekeeping, and cashier work, to the front desk at hotels, to Direct Support and CNA/Home health care. I've also worked in factories through agencies. Yet here I am. Today I went down to a local hotel, which I worked at 20 years ago, to inquire about a job. They aren't ready to hire for many hours yet... blah, blah, blah... we had a nice discussion though and I found myself telling him that I found several errors on his website. LOL He wrote it but it was put up by the company that built the website. You would think they would proof their own work... or correct the errors of someone who's ESL.
So, now, even though I don't want a real job, I'm not going to really get one. I know this one. It will give me time to still do this. I can take a pad and paper with me and write whatever I want between having to do reservations and check people in. I am looking forward to some productive evening hours this summer! :)
I may have found the perfect way to blend the two for now while I can figure out what I want to do with this writing thing myself. I will tell you one thing, I have learned tons here. Much more than I ever learned anywhere else. I have never taken one of the classes offered but I've found that the published authors, the good ones... they can really teach you what to do. I had a great tutor for a little bit when I started my book, it's almost done. If he hadn't taken a hand in my 'education' here, it wouldn't be the same. He isn't the only one though. Many people helped in the process of its polishing. This place can be an amazing learning tool, just by reviewing alone. You can really get a feel for the way something should sound, or look... (just make sure you're reading a good one!) lol
You'll have great fun here if you use it for fun and knowledge and not for competition... there's no way to win here... lol

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2020
    Hello Susan! I am replying late because I thought it was best I took my time to be absolutely free first and then give proper time back to you! Thank you for sharing your experiences and insights. One thing you perhaps chanced upon about me is that yes, I indeed came here to participate in contests regularly. They are all fun and different and keep me on my toes. I have to come up with different content all the time and use writing styles which I did not even know about before! So, that is all helpful to me as a writer and hopeful poet.
    I too am looking to this new challenge I have taken upon to get me to where I need to be in life. All my life to this moment I have only been a lazy procrastinator and never even had a job due to various reasons. I am hoping that is about to change soon. I need to become a better person all round before its too late. I have only the best wishes for you and hope your first book is a success. So far, this has been a good 1st week for me on this platform and I am hoping that in the times to come I get better at my writing because of it.
    Please keep reading my content and get back to me with your insightful feedback! Thank you so much! :-)
Comment from evesayshi
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In my opinion, a notable soliloquy, hesitant perhaps in objective, but accepting and hopeful in conclusive direction - a bit uneven in the movement, but an inviting read, regardless. Best wishes in the contest...

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2020
    Thank you for the kind feedback. I know I need to work on my rhythm and improve it further as you just mentioned. Glad you found it an inviting read regardless :-)
reply by evesayshi on 16-Jan-2020
    You are very welcome, Aaqib, and thank you for sharing this work...Eve
Comment from Jmf4119
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Thank you for sharing your story in this thoughtful quatrain poem for the contest.
Perfect artwork to check compliment your work.

Well done
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
    Glad you liked it. Luckily I was able to find the perfect art wok to depict what a heavy burden and responsibility a pen has the ability to become. Thanks :-)
Comment from jenintorre
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Yes you are a talented writer. I really enjoyed reading this quatrain poem and can relate to it. Great rhyme and well chosen illustration. Good luck in the competition. Jen.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2020
    Thank you for such kindness and encouragement! The poem finished 2nd in the contest. Cheers :-)
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the Quatrain poetry writing prompt.
This well rhymed verse tells of the author's talent being wasted.
Well done and I wish you lots of luck with the contest.
Sharon

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Thank you for the feedback! Yes, the competition is on going and I?ve got my fingers crossed!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
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This is really good. I love the message conveyed in it. A wasted talent is a waste of life and what could have been. I like what you've done with this. Your writing ability is definitely on display here. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done!

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    I wholeheartedly agree with the wasted talent part as that is the last thing I wish to be and feel like right now. Your encouragement is morale boosting. If you like my work well enough, and If me asking is not against the rules, then kindly vote for it in the contest as well. Thank you!
Comment from Barbaraj1
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Your poem was an enjoyable read. I think we all start writing with a little
self-doubt. But reading your poem tells me your very talented. I love the
artwork.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Glad you liked it. Your words of encouragement are appreciated! If you like my work well enough, and If me asking is not against the rules, then kindly vote for it in the contest as well. Thank you!
Comment from Gail Denham
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A most thoughtful poem. I appreciated that you explored your desire, your need to write. Well done. I would have liked to see a few examples of this journey - the boulders you encountered, the places you had success. Just a thought.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2020


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2020
    Thank you for the kind words. The journey part was deliberately missing as I meant to portray how most of this has only been in my head so far and hidden from other people. I keep contemplating it on my own. The last stanza should help clarify that I am ?barely past the starting hurdles? meaning the real journey is yet to begin! Hope that answers your query.
    If you like my work well enough, and If me asking is not against the rules, then kindly vote for it in the contest as well. Thank you!
reply by Gail Denham on 15-Jan-2020
    Thanks for explanation - good luck in the contest.