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Remember Me

On A Day Like Today

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Comment from JudyE
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Some many of the doomed on that day must have had similar inane, inconsequential thoughts. Most wouldn't have really known what was happening, only that there was nothing good about it. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
    Thank you Judy E, I'm glad you enjoyed this xoxoxo
Comment from Michele Harber
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OMG, Chris, did you know anyone in the Twin Towers on 9/11? I did. I, in fact, have a friend, Karen, who was evacuated (in time, thank goodness) from the South Tower after the North Tower was hit, and your story rings so true based on what Karen, who did take the elevator, told me. She was, at the time, overweight and in poor health. She worked on, perhaps, the 16th floor and, when they told her she had to walk down the stairs, she refused and took the elevator. The evacuation was started when she was having breakfast, before the second plane hit, so no one knew their building was going to face the same fate as the other. As she was going down, she wasn't thinking about possible death. She was aggravated that they'd interrupted her breakfast, frustrated that they were taking her away from work she had to do, and angry that they'd expected her to take the stairs.

As they say about someone's life flashing before their eyes when they think they're going to die, your people in the elevator aren't thinking about a painful death, or heaven or hell or whatever they think comes at the end. They're thinking about life - what they didn't do, what they should have done, what still needs to be done and, extrapolating from that, what they'll do if they survive. Their thoughts are very real and very human and, particularly in the case of "Will you remember me," very poignant and touching. In the plane where the hijackers were brought down by the passengers, so that the crash wouldn't take down thousands of people, as many as had working cell phones called their loved ones to say goodbye, making sure they'd be remembered.

I wonder if any of the feelings your elevator occupants expressed are based on your own, having been in the path of the devastating fires in New South Wales. Whatever you based the fears and feelings and comments on, they ring true, and make the reader want to know the passengers' fate.

P.S.: Karen, obviously, survived, as did, as far as I know, all of the coworkers in her office but, of course, so many others in the building were not as fortunate. After having come so close to death, Karen put herself into an extended care medical facility where she was able to receive help for many of her medical issues. She was also put on a diet that she followed religiously. She's know healthier and thinner than I've ever known her to be. I suspect that, if your elevator passenger survives, she'll feed her cat, check her iron, and mend all of her bridges.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
    Wow, thanks for this glowing review! No, I knew no-one who survived or was involved in 9/11. I hate to think how I would've been feeling that day if I did! Imagine the worry...It doesn't bear thinking about.

    My goodness, your friend Karen should be sharing her story with the many. She would be not only valued as a survivor, but also because she managed to turn her own life around after this tragedy.

    Thanks again for your encouraging words and rating my friend xoxoxoxoxo
reply by Michele Harber on 07-Mar-2020
    It's my pleasure, Chris. And I made a very definite point of showing that I got the 9/11 connection. xoxoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
    I noticed that, and I'm pleased to say, that two other reviewers picked up on it as well. I'm even happier that no-one has taken offence or got touchy over it either!
reply by Michele Harber on 07-Mar-2020
    There absolutely is nothing about it to take as offensive or get touchy over. It's sensitive and true to life. I'm glad others are making the 9/11 connection.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
    Yeah I am too, because it is a vital ingredient, if that's the word. Thanks too, for highlighting it in your review my dearest buddy-chum-pal lol
reply by Michele Harber on 07-Mar-2020
    My pleasure!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from Bill Schott
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This one-hundred-fifty word flash fiction story, Remember Me, has the proper word count and marks one of the times that we all knew where we were. Some may have realized where they were was a last stop.So many things will always be left undone, but life turns ona dime. Great little story of 9-11.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    Thank you very much indeed, Bill. I still remember what I was doing when I got the news here, almost a day after it happened. I will never forget it; it is embedded in my memory, like it would be for most people the world over xoxoxoxox
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
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Good one and sad one too for the tragedy it was! Great effort on your part to be able to fit this tale in 150 words.

I guess if you do have time to think in a tragedy before you die, you would think of any loose ends that you should have tied! So, that makes your story more realistic for me!

Best wishes for the contest!

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    Thanks Aaqib...it appears you "got" what the story was about on all levels, which does m'heart good lol!
reply by Aaqib Naeem on 06-Mar-2020
    You can say that! But unfortunately I always crack a smile whenever people use this expression...on so many/all levels...especially when there is an elevator in the story!(your protagonist is stuck in one) Its like a pun right there for the picking haha!

    Like...man, that was funny on so many levels!..Well, we are riding an elevator! ;-)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    Lol! Don't ya love word plays??
reply by Aaqib Naeem on 06-Mar-2020
    Haha I sure do!
    Have a great day :-)
Comment from Gideon300
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I really like how this life review started, stuck in an elevator wondering about what she left behind unfinished. I also liked how that started with simple things like did she leave the iron on, but ends with remember me.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    Thank you very much Gideon300 xoxoxoxox
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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It is some of the oddest things that come to mind at times like that... no explanation, just random with love mixed in... ;) A great offering of being in such a precarious, life-changing or -ending situation... Good luck! ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    Thanks Yvette, I'm glad you "got" what I was trying to convey. Thanks also for the good luck wishes xoxoxoxox
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very well written and very interesting Flash Fiction story you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words. I would be like you and wondering if I had fed the cats and if they were all o.k. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    Thanks very much Teri, have a lovely day xoxoxo
Comment from the13thpoet
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Hello Gypsymooncat, a TGIFriday to you. I hope this finds you well. Thank you for sharing your flash fiction, to tell a story in so few words is a challenge that you executed well. Good job and good luck.

Did I turn off the stove and feed the dog.....lol

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    Lol! Hope you did both of those things...

    Thanks for your excellent review and rating xoxoxo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Our thoughts become so odd in these situations. I have been stuck in a lift and was rescued quite quickly and did not have time to panic, but it was potentially very scary and we contemplate our lives and wonder about those little things we did or did not do, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
    Thanks Dolly. I was caught in a lift for four hours when I was about 18, and it was a very interesting experience indeed. I was in there with another girl, and we just cracked jokes, jumped up and down, pressed the emergency button a million times (because we were stupid) and eventually, security came and got us out! I appreciate your comments and rating xoxoxox