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Sibling Ties

A young boy must help his sister.

4 total reviews 
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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Wizard Darcy saved his sister Marcy by turning water into blood; rightly, moral of the story is well expressed, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this fantasy fiction; keep posting. Good luck. ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 07-May-2020


reply by the author on 08-May-2020
    Thanks for the review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
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Quite the surprise ending using an idiom I had heard of but did not see coming. I might suggest adding: He thought that she might be able to float if the water were thicker.

 Comment Written 07-May-2020


reply by the author on 08-May-2020
    Thanks for the review and suggestion.
Comment from kahpot
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Very well described how blood is thicker than water, the last line in the third paragraph "in the warmth of of his..." might need to get rid of one of, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 07-May-2020


reply by the author on 08-May-2020
    Thanks for the review and comment.
Comment from LisaMay
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That is a lovely story! Darcy's family ties overcame his jealousy when tested. Hooray for a happy ending. I wish my older brother had been a Darcy. My brother pushed me in and laughed as I was swept away.

 Comment Written 07-May-2020


reply by the author on 08-May-2020
    Thanks for the review and laugh.