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The Train

It happened to me...

7 total reviews 
Comment from Daniel Ayles
Excellent
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You do an amazing job of pacing and creating tension in your writing. Clever concept. Well-executed. You always develop character and atmosphere very well. I enjoy your work.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
    Thank you very much for reading my older work. I'm doing my best to improve. Thank you very much for the high praise!
reply by Daniel Ayles on 13-Oct-2020
    You?re welcome.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
    :)
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Excellent
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The reader will identify with scenerio of hearing the words of some teacher, parent or in my case, my therapist. We find ourselves talking back to them just as in thios case. The other thing this cautionary tale addresses is attentiveness or lack there of, while driving. Another issue the reader will be able to relate to. Many readers who have had them, will be able to identify with the issue of night terrors. There are so many things I could write but this ios enough. Well done.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
    Thank Liz for this lovely review! I'm very glad you enjoyed it and was able to relate to some of the story! Thanx!
Comment from writer723
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I enjoyed this very interesting and exciting story. A woman with super powers saving a little boy. I think it's pretty cool that her parents worry about her and they have no idea that she's a superhero. Your tale was intriguing and suspenseful.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
    Wow. Thank you so much! Very glsd you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading!
Comment from Colin John
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Hi, this is a great contest entry and the whole story had a good edge to it and I hope you do well in the upcoming contest , thanks for sharing kind regards Colin xx

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
    Thanks, Colin! I worked really hard on this, thank you for reading. I appreciate your lovely review!
Comment from Anne-Marie brison
Excellent
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Dear AJ,


Awesome job!!!! I loved how you made her hear her dad's voice in her head telling her what to do!!!! Remarkable job!!!
Her super power is so cool!! Best of luck with the contest, you deserve to win!!!

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    Thanks Brison! I'm still working on it actually so please go back and read it once I finish. Thanks for reviewing!

    (Did you get my message for dragon story?)
Comment from Ric Myworld
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

You just keep getting better all the time. I'm really enjoying watching the progress and can hardly wait to read more. Thanks for sharing another fine story.

Glass (pierced her skin with the force of daggers) (remove-pricked her skin), her head cracking against the back of the chair...

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    Hi, Ric! Nice to hear from you again! I'm actually in the process of writing it right this second so... yeah. I was trying to beat that deadline so I decided to just post it then edit the rest in.

    Thanks for the six stars! I wasn't expecting that. A very nice treat. Please read it again once I'm finished if you have time. I want you to get the full story. Thanks Ric!
reply by Ric Myworld on 02-Sep-2020
    Consider it done. But I won't change the sixer. LOL.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    YES! Thanks!
Comment from equestrik
Good
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I thought that you did a good job of holding interest. I think in this line it would read better to say, : 'If she had never reached' rather than, "If she had never went to reach." I am not sure what super powers you received after the accident though as the prompt requires.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
    Thanks for reviewing, and I'm still editing, I'll be fixing that mistake you pointed out! Please consider re-reading it once I'm finished! Thank you again!