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Par Angusta Ad Augusta

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Through Trial to Triumph

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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Excellent
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This is the third--fourth?--one I've read tonight--they keep popping up--was just about to shut down a 2am but couldn't resist this compelling story. Fine work! Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
    Thank you. Glad I've sucked you in.
Comment from equestrik
Excellent
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i thought I hd reviewed this one..anyway. I enjoy this story and I feel you have the children well described and well understood. My favorite line is: "He can't see you do that," Cassandra reminded her. "Don't bother." It made me chuckle.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
    Yes, I enjoy adding little amusing moments like that. Many of my blind friends enjoyed it as well. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Bramsey Ringleb
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I am really enjoying the chapters of this book. I am going to keep notifications on to find out when there are new chapters! As I said last time, I really the pace, which is something I struggle with when I write. So when it has such a natural seeming flow to it, I am impressed an encouraged at once. I can also say from experience that the children are written as very convincing. I have three kids, and I felt that the way Mathew plays with his fingers and tries to count the planes, he seems like a real kid. Abigail wanting to ride the luggage cart was funny, because each of my kids has asked at least once to do that. Taylor hit home even more than the other kids. My husband died in a car accident when my kids young, and my 8 year old had some of the same angry reactions. Good job on writing grieving kids. A lot of the time they go between sad and angry, and then curious and more every day than an adult, because even if they seem to understand the finality, and even if they miss whoever is gone, they don't fully get it, and they really do have a lot ahead of them.
I can't wait to read more. I got just as lost in the story with Monique as with Jefferson and the kids!

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
    Thank you. Considering I don't have kids, I appreciate your fedback on how they are being portrayed.