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Through Trial to Triumph

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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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(had drank s/b had drunk)

So real! You capture so many moments for all characters--raw emotions--also good work with auxiliary people, e.g. attendant's attentions! Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Thank you. I'll fix that.
Comment from Bramsey Ringleb
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I'm still enjoying this story as much as when I started. I'm excited to read about the characters all coming together, and again, I'm impressed with the way the kids are being portrayed. Of course, I think the other characters seem very natural and the narration is also very good. Grieving children is hard. I think that one being to young, one seeming (keyword is seeming) most unaffected, and one kid really being distraught sounds very right. Great job.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
    Thank you kindly.
Comment from equestrik
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This is a good and well written continuation of your story. I like how you are developing the characters as well as the story. Nicely done. It will be good to see Monique more. :)

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
    Thank you. We'll see Monique plenty more soon.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Jefferson and Monique - are they going to be a couple? Wow that will be wonderful with 3 kids bonus:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
    Thank you. I don't give away my endings.