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Par Angusta Ad Augusta

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Through Trial to Triumph

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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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I think you did a great job with this chapter. I enjoy your story telling ability. This flowed easily. The dialogue brought your characters to life for me. An enjoyable read.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
    Thank you kindly.
Comment from AnnieDawn
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This was an interesting read and kept the reader going through with ease. The only comment I would have is the frequent switch back and forth between the two scenes so frequently which seemed excessive for just one chapter. Otherwise, it was a good read and enjoyable. Thank you for sharing. Great job.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
    Yeah, that got a bit clunky. I've been trying to revise that. You should see the first draft. :) Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from equestrik
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I like this chapter and even though it is hard that the children, especially Taylor were reminded of their parent's deaths, they got through it. Unfortunately it will come up a lot whether in school or out and about.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
    Exactly. Thanks for following the story.