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Through Trial to Triumph

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Comment from Iza Deleanu
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I think you captured very well the scene of the runaway and the consequences that comes with that. Jefferson its learning together with the kids the responsibilities of being a parent.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
    Thank you very much.
Comment from equestrik
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Things are certainly unravelling as he 'honeymoon' period for the kids comes to an end. Poor Taylor is having a tough time. This was a good well developed chapter.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
    Thank you kindly.
Comment from AnnieDawn
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This chapter, to me, was just right with no mistakes that I could find. The only thing that I could find to comment on was a word, and that could be just a personal observation, but one that I think will improve the sentence. Great chapter, good job.

Memories of the recent robbery were slivering into her head and she tried hard to push them back. ("slivering" does not seem to fit in this sentence)

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
    Thank you. I'll think about that word.