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Through Trial to Triumph

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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This rearranged chapter 18 of the fiction is a nice work with a good taletelling about dealing with the fallout of Taylor's flight; progressed through steady plot development, realistic dialogues, informative beginning and curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Thank you kindly.
Comment from roof35
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You moved the story along nicely and set the stage for a better relationship with the kids and a bigger relationship with Linda. It is well written with no errors. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
    Thank you kindly.
Comment from equestrik
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Jefferson is making progress with Taylor, I think what i missing is love. He is doing his duty to his brother's children and doing it well but the love is not there.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
    Thank you. I will try and portray that better.