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Through Trial to Triumph

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Comment from AnnieDawn
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This seems to be the right length for one of your chapters so if you have condensed, you have done it well. I read through slowly and could find no suggestions in this one for any revision or correction. Perfect in my reviewing. Great job as usual.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
    Thank you very much for all your help.
Comment from equestrik
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You definitely started out with a good bit of excitement with the pooper scooper monster. I was also drawn in by the harsh reality that those with paralysis must endure. good reality check.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
    Thank you kindly.
Comment from Ben Colder
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Perfect. I love the monster scene, it was so real. I could see it all unfolding. This should be made into a movie.
I find nothing wrong and enjoyed what I read.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    Thank you. I based Abigail's reaction on a childhood memory of being scared by a chimmney cleaner. I'm already casting (in my head, at least) in Hollywood.
Comment from TommyWrites
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Another really interesting chapter you have here!
I'm sure I missed a few, and yet, I still felt as though I could follow along quite nicely.
Like I said before, I like how you've made your characters. Each one is uniquely different, which helps brings some light to your chapters.
It was clever to have the poop scooper look like a monster, which helped the story seem more...realistic. If that makes sense. ;)
Overall, another good chapter to your book!
Thanks for sharing,
TommyWrites~

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    Thanks. I based Abigail's reaction on my own when I mistook a chimmney cleaner for a monster.
reply by TommyWrites on 21-Sep-2020
    Ha! That's great. You're very welcome. :)