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Par Angusta Ad Augusta

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Through Trial to Triumph

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Comment from AnnieDawn
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A very well put together chapter. Not too much to the sex part which makes it nice and not gross. Your characters are to down to earth to be that sexual. Nicely done and a good read. No errors that I could find.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
    Thank you ever so much.
Comment from equestrik
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Interesting to throw that broken pipe in there, it was a good way to get Monique more involved. I do think it would endear Jefferson to the readers more if he were more tender toward the children.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
    Thank you. I will see what I can do about that.
Comment from roof35
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The story is moving along nicely and it is well written. I think you do have a typo: You said, "Jefferson having miss the entire thing." This it should be "missed."

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
    Thank you. I will dive in and fix that.