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Through Trial to Triumph

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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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What does a law professor know about handling this sort of a situation? It is obvious he is going from moment to moment and relying on his instincts. Eventually, I'm sure, he will get the hang of how children need comfort and security and will be able to fit into the role that is needed.
How have these issues suddenly piled up and doesn't he remember that Monique is waiting for him? The story has much depth.

Ralf


 Comment Written 06-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
    Thank you for reviewing.
reply by Raffaelina Lowcock on 06-Oct-2020
    Actually, this review was taken from chapter 35. Since you rearranged your chapters it ended under the wrong chapter. So I cut and pasted it where it belonged.
    Ralf
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
    :) Thank you nonetheless.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Stunning depiction of a terrible crime against a child--masterful depiction of her terror and Jefferson's anguish and second-guessing--rings true--superb dialog. Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2020


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
    Thank you very much.
Comment from pome lover
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just read this after the other chapter that I read first.(sorry, can't remember the name of it)
Here is another instance where if he (Jefferson) is blind, how could he "look at her for a long minute"? after he put the CDs back in the drawer.
I had to see how his everyday life went - how he handled it. I think you have interesting characters with truly difficult situations.
pome lover

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
    Thank you. I use "look" in a general sense, not literally. Blind people face the people they are interacting with and come pretty close to looking the other person in the eye.
reply by pome lover on 28-Sep-2020
    well, why not say, "he was silent for a long moment as he faced her" or "he faced her for a long moment." Then the reader doesn't think it's a slip. (just a suggestion)
Comment from equestrik
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Things are moving along well and the writing is good as you develop all the characters and situations. The thing with Amy could be very messy-I hope Amy lets it go. This is the first time I have noticed touching on Jefferson's sadness in losing his brother.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
    Thank you. His sadness has been touched on lightly in the past. Now that his new life has become more organized, emotions have their turn.