General Poetry posted August 4, 2021


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An Atrina poem

The Teasing Hummingbird

by damommy


The hummingbird for nectar searched,
I saw how eagerly he perched,
how eagerly I saw he perched,
the hummingbird for nectar searched.
 
He lit so lightly on the rail
his wings he stretched and twitched his tail
he stretched his wings and twitched his tail
he lit so lightly on the rail.
 
When, in the window, saw the cat
came close to tease, the birdie brat,
to tease came close, the birdie brat,
when in the window, saw the cat.
 
The hummingbird for nectar searched
I saw how eagerly he perched
He lit so lightly on the rail
his wings he stretched and twitched his tail
 
When, in the window, saw the cat
to tease came close, the birdie brat.

 



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August
2021


He does this everyday, comes to the window and twitches his tail at the cats.

A stanzaic poem of 18 lines, consisting of 3 quatrains and a sestet.

It is isosyllabic. Each line has 8 syllables.

Rhymed: AaaA BbbB CccC AaBbCc where the capital letters indicate refrain lines.
(AaaABbbBCccCAaBbCc)

The first and last lines in each verse are exactly the same.

The third line in each verse is of similar wording to the second line or reversed. However, it is preferred to use the same words but reversed.

AN ATRINA:

Her heart it pales in shades of grey,
The pain inside to ever stay,
Inside the pain to ever stay,
Her heart it pales in shades of grey,

Reciting all the poems sheâ??d read,
The lover lost within her bed,
Lost the lover within her bed,
Reciting all the poems sheâ??d read,

And deep within she still believes,it
The angels keep her heart its grief,
The grief her heart the angels keep,
And deep within she still believes,

Her heart it pales in shades of grey,
The pain inside to ever stay,
Reciting all the poems sheâ??d read,
The lover lost within her bed,

And deep within she still believes.
The angels keep her heart its grief.


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