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In My Time of Need by barbara.wilkey

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Haven't been on the site in forever. Randomly stopped by today just to see what your pen was up to. I see it is blurting out things that are pressing in, and scribbling kept promises that are pushing back at the pressing things. "In My Time of Need" houses a conversation that would be apropos in the midst of so many different battles. It is heavy and light at the same time, a bootstrap poem with good balance from a pen directed by the heart. Thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written by slippery noodles on 15-Feb-2011

Chapter 2 Part Two by barbara.wilkey
Chapter 4 of the book Another Pretty Face

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Barbara your story is addictive.
From the beginning of this chapter I expected Joe and Sara to still be circling each other, stepping a little closer. It was good to see them still cautiously testing the waters. Judging from the pacing of this story so far, I'm expecting to see the chase come to a close somewhere in the next chapter... or almost to a close and then get deterred by something. Hope I don't have to wait too long to find out.

The timing was good for bringing Cassie into the action between these two.

The story stays pretty focused on the relationship between Sara and Joe. I'm wondering what both Joe and Sara do with themselves when they are not together. And curious about what the other characters are up to or thinking about these two. But that's just me being nosy.

Joe's a perceptive bugger, catching on to the reason for Sara's sudden mood shift so quickly. I kind of wanted to see him have to work a little harder to figure it out.

I like where the chapter ended, abruptly with a nice bit of revelation from Joe.
Good so far you. Waiting for more...
Comment Written by slippery noodles on 10-Jul-2010

Reviews: What Works Best For Me by another jim

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Sheesh!
How'm I spost to rvw that?
Um, your adverb paragraph was perfectly.
just one thing, mayB you should... naw,never mind.
Whish I knew who you were so I don't axidently review you wrongly sometime...
Yur thingy that you wrote. It was entertaining. And stuff.
And you know what, I'm just gonna give you six strs. Just because.
Besides they were all pointy and jumbled and poking a hole in my pocket. Have em!
oh, thank you
Comment Written by slippery noodles on 29-Jun-2010
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Carrot on a Stick by anabelle

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I love this! Excellent choice of setting. Having an audience reaction play out the effect of each rating is revealing but not preachy or whiny. A refreshing approach to the evasive answer for that pesky question: "What do writers want?" I wonder how reviews would have been delivered and received in this setting if the author on stage was not quite at the best seller stage yet.
Tactful honesty is what I expect in a review. Rationale and specific examples give the review more clout.
Comment Written by slippery noodles on 26-Jun-2010
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Chapter 1 Part one by barbara.wilkey
Chapter 1 of the book Another Pretty Face

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Fun, uncomplicated beginning. Easy dialogue. A quick dip into the back-story gives just enough information but doesn't drag on. I think I might know these people. Hm. The characters are a little on the perfect side, but then that's kind of how it goes sometimes in romantic fiction. Sandy's entrance and Joe's spontaneous commitment to attend the reunion was a nice hook for the story. I enjoyed the chapter and am looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written by slippery noodles on 25-Jun-2010

Come as You Are by Rdfrdmom2
Chapter 18 of the book Spiritually Speaking

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Strong message. The internal rhyme in line five is catchy. I halfway expected the last word in that line to match "pain/shame" as well. Having the words "as you are" at both the beginning and the end of the poem firmly promotes the message "come as you are." I enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written by slippery noodles on 25-Jun-2010

Family Chores by SamanthaD.
Chapter 2 of the book Slices of Life

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chores - a topic that most people can relate to, good choice. Your story moves quickly and has a fun ending (even if it's not true). In a short amount of time you had me glowering at Rebecca and Elaine, and thinking twice about weather or not I react differently to each of my kids when they ask for money.
Hm, I wonder if a teacher ever catches herself doling out different reactions like that to various students that don't get their homework done...
Comment Written by slippery noodles on 23-Jun-2010

School Daze by bluedragon776
Chapter 4 of the book Complications

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Your writing offers vivid descriptions, dialogue and actions that give clues to character traits, and interesting interaction between characters. There are quite a few grammatical errors. There are also some places with awkward or confusing phrasing. I can be more specific, but only if you are interested. The story line is easy to follow and moves along at a good pace. At the end of the chapter I am interested in reading more, to learn what happens with Kisha and her family.
Comment Written by slippery noodles on 16-Jun-2010

gyoji haiku (purification) by skye

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This poem stirred me and my morning coffee. Taking a shower will somehow be different now. Thank you for sharing the background information. I think it helped with interpretation.
Comment Written by slippery noodles on 11-Jun-2010
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

a slow dance by shelley kaye
Chapter 89 of the book anything goes in words unspoken

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This poem is great! The phrasing of this poems has a rhythm that's a lot like dancing.
I especially enjoyed:
"traveling

as she holds her partner
in her hand
and glides with him"

...as well as the backtracking at the end.
Good work!
Comment Written by slippery noodles on 10-Jun-2010


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