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friend by mahmoud 12

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Please forgive me, I'm not to familiare with these kinda poems... but I don't get what your trying to say.

Now this is just me and I would love if you explain it just a little bit. But this lacks a little more detail in it.

I'm sorry for the 4star...
Goldie
Comment Written by Goldie-Lopez on 29-Mar-2014
Goodbye Song by DonandVicki

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Interesting style and choice of words. Very touching, with a hidden sadden gloom. The flow of the poem was very well written and storytelling was good too.

Thank you for sharing- Goldie
Comment Written by Goldie-Lopez on 29-Mar-2014
Let it Rain by Kingsland
Chapter 95 of the book The Now

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I really like this one for the upbeat feeling it gives and there's a sense of sadness, but hope is right around the corner sorta speaking.

The words are very gentle and calming, almost soothing and refreshing. The flow of the poem was very nice and well written as well. Overall Good storytelling.

Thanks for sharing- Goldie
Comment Written by Goldie-Lopez on 29-Mar-2014
Masked by MoonWillow

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Nice word flow and movement of this short piece. I liked how you in very few words describe a situation where people aren't being authenticate with one another. And nice grammar as well.
Comment Written by Goldie-Lopez on 29-Mar-2014
Jesus by ravenblack

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Very expressive while telling the story of the immigrant. I like how you throw a cheer of the Lord honoring how he helps people/you. Interesting poem style and very well written.


Goldie
Comment Written by Goldie-Lopez on 29-Mar-2014
Raindrops by Claire VanDyke

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This is a very nice inspirational piece. At first I didn't get it, I must admit it's been awhile since I've been or Fanstoory... but I got the full image at the ending.. very creative!

Thanks for sharing- Goldie
Comment Written by Goldie-Lopez on 29-Mar-2014
New Personnel by storyman29
Chapter 41 of the book The Resolute ... But Careless Spy

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Well written, good word usage and storytelling. I laughed a bit... I'm not sure if you were going for that. But I think everyone their always has to be a screw up lol.

Thanks for sharing
Comment Written by Goldie-Lopez on 29-Mar-2014
My House XXV by Righteous Riter

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Wow, this sounds like a true story here. Good word usage and storytelling is excellent. Flow read like a story, but the ending flowed like a poem. Very creative and well written.

Goldie
Comment Written by Goldie-Lopez on 29-Mar-2014
the retireded by LIJ Red

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This was very interesting, the word play is good. I'm a bit confused though... as to what your trying to say.

But maybe that's what your going for here... but overall it's good.

Thanks for sharing
Goldie
Comment Written by Goldie-Lopez on 29-Mar-2014
A Magdala Message by Tom Rinkes
Chapter 7 of the book And So Am I

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You know what is funny, I read early yesterday my daily app of the Holy Bible and one of the verses that caught my eyes and made me cry was... Cevdcus 6;43-46

And reading this made me very happy. You did an awesome job with storytelling, keeping the story fresh with plenty of word play.

I must say it's a bit long for my taste but I loved it truly. I felt as if I was among the followers of Yeshua(Jesus to me) and I was the character, seeing everything. Beautiful!

May I ask what time period did all this take place?
Also... there are a few errors with grammar...
But not sure if that's what you where going for.


Goldie
Comment Written by Goldie-Lopez on 29-Mar-2014
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