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EverInParadise

Fields of Blue by Val Crisson

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Delightful phrasing and a really good choice of art for this Poem. You held the line and carried the idea clearly forward. I even count4d the syllables as it was so clean I thought maybe there were not all there. But they were and you did it. Congrats
Comment Written by EverInParadise on 09-Apr-2018
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Give me a kiss by jenintorre

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Nicely done and what a great piece of art to go with your clever lines. I realize these type poems may look and sound simple, but in truth it takes your type of talent to pull it off this well. Thank you, it is a fun read.
Comment Written by EverInParadise on 09-Apr-2018
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Backpedaling by gene roush
Chapter 6 of the book Back Pedaling

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Really an interesting story building here. Your descriptive pictures move along well. Sometimes when I experiment with dialogue I become so engaged in the effort I do harm to really good dialogue. I think your effect is working well. The area where the self talk leads to a a surprise is tantalizing. I'll have to keep an eye on this.
Comment Written by EverInParadise on 09-Apr-2018

Learning by AshelinaB
Chapter 1 of the book Just Kid Stuff

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What an interesting story and placement of the main characters. This has so much going on, The heroine's personality moves the action forward in a good pace. Some of the action and dialogue is a bit stilted where other times it became a bit too repetitive. Still the story carries the action and determination of the characters very well.
Comment Written by EverInParadise on 09-Apr-2018

Back To Sloaney Filly - Part 3 by apky
Chapter 17 of the book LONDON SPARKS

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Good writing from start to finish. I few to many "I remembered.,," that could be developed with different terms. One question, she was drinking wine and then wondered it what she was feeling was because of the vodka. Perhaps I missed something. This chapter seems a bit lengthy but people do get into these intimate conversation's at times. You did good job in handling the dialogue flow.
Comment Written by EverInParadise on 03-Apr-2018

Families at War by Mustang Patty
Chapter 37 of the book Poetry 2018

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Tough topic well spent here The colors and picture you chose certainly added strength to this submission. This type poetry brings your skills to a high level.
Comment Written by EverInParadise on 23-Mar-2018

Suburban Trash Talk by humpwhistle

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Very cute story and told well. Neighbors being at their best aren't always appreciated. Too bad the restricted word count didn't allow the droopy drawers to fall. Maybe next week.
Comment Written by EverInParadise on 23-Mar-2018

Dreams and Nightmares - Part Two by Mustang Patty
Chapter 2 of the book Dreams and Nightmares 2018

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Good stuff except for the dog name. Harley is becoming the "see Spot run" of this generation. Just joking. Story looks interesting. I will follow.
Comment Written by EverInParadise on 22-Mar-2018

Tribute To Daniel Radcliffe by stevensandiego
Chapter 10180 of the book My Memoirs - Part One

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Have not read your offerings before. Daniel's name in the title brought me to this spot. The prompt you give; to go to youtube to experience more of the actor's many talents was an invitation I appreciated. Thank you for this information.
Comment Written by EverInParadise on 25-Dec-2017

Alehouse Rock by duaneculbertson

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An entire bar fight I assume from all the wonderful descriptions you included. Very well done. Good luck with this entry.
Comment Written by EverInParadise on 13-Nov-2017
Read and reviewed with blinders on.


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