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My precious Poo by Domjponi

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Lovely poem about your daughter. Just found one thing - should the last sentence read A beloved daughter that I call my Heavin Lee Rain rather than a call my Heavin?
Sound poem otherwise! edieas
Comment Written by edieas on 12-May-2016

Share His Love by William Ross

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I really like this poem. Of course, most faith-based I do enjoy. I just noted one thing I might suggest you look at. Would it be better if you said "strive to" rather than "strife to" in that next to last sentence? Just a thought. And thanks for the read. edieas
Comment Written by edieas on 12-May-2016

Trumpet by jonathan1

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I think this is a splendid effort for your first piece! I am honored you asked me to review your work. These two sentences "A beginners pause as your lungs swell,
lucky there is beauty from my bell." are a bit out of rhythm with the rest of the poem. Listen and you can hear it, too. But this is NOT to stop you. You do have talent my friend - just need some practise. My best advise is to be your best ear. You will receive lots of advise out here but ultimately you are your own best judge. Best of luck and welcome to our group! edieas
Comment Written by edieas on 07-May-2016
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

A Soldier's Life by LisaD123

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I grew up Army brat and this sort of mentality permeates the entire household. Be yourself as long as the door is closed but use decorum beyond the gate. I know how hard it is to live like this. Thanks so much for the read. I really appreciated it. edieas
Comment Written by edieas on 03-May-2016
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Withstand by AlexG94

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I love how a Haiku forces the writer to be concise and understandable. I like "cracked concrete" and
verdant resistance. Nice job! edieas
Comment Written by edieas on 03-May-2016

Dangerous Arrogance by frogbook

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Oh how hilarious and there is even some resemblanc there. Thanks so much for the read. (The hair style is a dead ringer) lol!!!!!!!!!!
Comment Written by edieas on 03-May-2016
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Looks Just Like You Baby by johnwilson

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So, so sad, but there is some happiness in your last few words when you find her. Emotionally packed piece and I thank you for it. edieas
Comment Written by edieas on 03-May-2016

Top Down, Springtime Day by Treischel
Chapter 135 of the book Family

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A foxy gray haired daddy-o in his foxy ride. Does life get any better for us? The waist band bends southward but the spirit soars! Love it! Thanks for the write and to your wife, forgive my flirt. lol
Comment Written by edieas on 03-May-2016

Daddy's Girl by Michael Bowman

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Very nice little poem. I was a daddy's girl so this means a lot to me. "...
I'm Daddy's girl
I have no fear
When you return
I'm waiting here
This Daddy's girl's...
Very nice. Thanks for the read!
Comment Written by edieas on 12-Apr-2016

Grace by Chris Walker

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Refusing to surrender to this
merciless disease,
I face Medusa's fury.
Taking grace with me
I let her see me."
I like this stanza best. It offers hope in the face of a terrible disease. Kudo's to you. edieas
Comment Written by edieas on 09-Apr-2016


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