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Siege 2020 by Robert Zimmerman

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You are absolutely right about everything you say in this well-written essay on present attempts to erase our nation's history and heritage by defacing and/or tearing down statues and monuments. Rising nations put up monuments to mark milestones in their history. Stagnant nations do not, and dying nations allow their monuments to be torn down. Of vital concern now is the matter of record that a society which allows mobs to tear down its monuments next experiences those mobs attacking citizens for the same "reasons" claimed to justify the destruction of monuments.

Thus, the upcoming election really is a referendum on whether or not our country should continue to exist as founded. Regardless of what one has come to believe about Trump and those who support him, he is the last bastion we have against losing our nation to what actually is a coordinated global Marxist uprising fostered by the Democrat/Socialist party and cheered on by the corrupt "news" media. Anyone who has been duped into believing a Democrat win will bring better times will soon discover the sad truth that not only will everything become increasingly worse, but also that they have contributed to its then being too late to stop the resultant disaster.

Yes, "Countries that deny their history have no future."

Superb, aptly illustrated, and including important notes.
Comment Written by WalkerMan on 01-Jul-2020

To Be Your Man (sweet pursuit) by Richard J

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This yet-to-be-requited romance, begun in a young man's thoughts, here blossoms into the more vivid desires of a mature man who has experienced much more of life. The essence of it is summed up in the beautiful last stanza:

All that life's splendor has taught me,
all I shall finally glimpse
for after an eternity ...
it is enough to finally embrace
the understanding,
"That all I ever wanted
or ever could,
is ...
to be your man."

Superb, and aptly illustrated.
Comment Written by WalkerMan on 30-Jun-2020

Double Blind~Chapter Eleven by Sally Law
Chapter 11 of the book Double Blind

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Because the kidnapper knows the police are looking for his red truck, he and Tine, both bundled in clothes they found at Ezra Ross's farmhouse, are hitchhiking until he can buy another vehicle. Coincidentally, Bobby's father, Russ DeWoody, comes by and stops to pick them up.

Tine is shrewd enough to ask to ride in the front passenger seat to avoid carsickness. Then the eagle distracts the kidnapper long enough for Tine to explain to Russ what is happening and give him her mother's locket as a love token for Bobby. You leave us hanging at that point, adding to our suspense, as you so deftly do.

Meanwhile, Detective Mike Lembowsky and Dr. Marie MacLavish discuss the case, including the two bodies with removed fingerprints retrieved from the Atchafalaya River. Dental records for one body identify him as Ed Silver, the name given by the man Detective Lembowsky met near Louie Louie's diner early in the story. Dr. MacLavish then says the two dead men resemble Guy Blanchette, who went to the same college as Tine's mother.

This is a fascinating book, and am glad to be reading it.

Superb, and aptly illustrated.
Comment Written by WalkerMan on 28-Jun-2020

We All Have Scars by Diana Kane

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This poem is exactly the right encouragement for someone who feels damaged in some way, whether physically (affecting outward appearance) or emotionally or in some other non-visible way.

Such words only can come from one who has endured life's twists and bumps and managed to acquire the resultant wisdom rather than wither.

Superb.

The following two easily fixed items remain.

Author Notes:

Line 3: bad Considering. => bad, considering.

Line 3: boy, (hell => boy (hell
[No comma before open parenthesis.]

Please tell me when these are corrected, and I'll remove my comments.
Comment Written by WalkerMan on 26-Jun-2020

Don't Destroy the House by Robert Zimmerman

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What we see here is what we will have in our country if the Marxist gangs (Antifa, BLM, and others) remain unpunished for opportunistically taking over otherwise peaceful protests about legitimate grievances and using them as an excuse to riot, destroy statues and monuments (regardless of their original reason for being), loot and/or burn uninvolved businesses, and injure or even kill anyone in the way. All this might have happened even sooner had HRC been elected to continue Mr. O's plan to "fundamentally change" our nation into what it was never meant to be -- a socialist Hell.

Your post is a superb metaphor for the Marxist attempted revolution now in progress, as the "silent coup" failed to keep Trump from being elected, and failed again to oust him using tactics best described as outright treason that ought to be severely slapped down to prevent more of the same.
Comment Written by WalkerMan on 26-Jun-2020

My Anchor by Diana Kane

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This poem of four quatrains with abcb rhyme scheme has irregular meter but flows smoothly enough for that not to be an issue.

Stanzas 1 and 3 describe the solace a true love can bring; stanza 2 expresses how such love frees the recipient to be "all [she] can be"; and stanza 4 expresses the resultant confidence the recipient can feel about future togetherness.

My favorite lines are the second stanza:

As deep as the ocean...
As steady as the tide...
I am all I can be
With you at my side.


Superb.
Comment Written by WalkerMan on 25-Jun-2020

Your Will by Manh C Dang

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Your degree of sincere reverence is clear for the circumstance you mention in the first line of each stanza, the "I praise You anyway" recurring second line, and the specific reason stated in each third line. Each stanza refers to another significant challenge to the solid faith you maintain throughout. Finally, in the last two stanzas, you explain the basis for all your separate reasons -- the fact that God's will is based on love. Superb, and aptly illustrated.
Comment Written by WalkerMan on 23-Jun-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Grandpa's Watch by JLR

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This is a heartwarming story-in-a-poem about what a young boy learned from his grandpa about how to endure Life's difficulties.

Winding the stem of his treasured gold Hamilton Railway Special watch received when he retired, his grandpa used doing so as a metaphor for taking a moment to tighten resolve to persevere through such circumstances.

Rather than leaving the precious watch to his grandson, this wise old man gave it to him upon his graduation, creating a solemn but loving moment the young man would always remember.

In consequence, the narrator carries on the tradition with his own grandchildren by telling them about what Life has taught him.

Superb, and aptly illustrated with a photo of that beautiful watch.

Three easily-fixed items not affecting the rating:

Stanza 1, line 3: giant of man's
Recommended: giant man's -OR- giant of a man's

St 2, ln 3: barks => bark's
[Singular possessive needed.]

St 8, ln 2: Railroad => Railway
[To match what is on the watch.]
Comment Written by WalkerMan on 23-Jun-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Fifth State of Matter in Space by lyenochka

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Your well-rhymed poem in flawless iambic tetrameter is a good introduction to the fifth state of matter for those unfamiliar with it.

If you arrange the five states as plasma, gas, liquid, solid, and the Bose and Einstein condensate (in that order), it makes sense if you realize that, from plasma on down the list, particle motion is slowing as temperature drops. At absolute zero Kelvin (-273.15 Celsius / -459.67 Fahrenheit), all motion ceases.

You researched the topic well, as usual; and the short video effectively illustrates Bose-Einstein condensation near absolute zero. Superb.
Comment Written by WalkerMan on 20-Jun-2020

Old Rusty Nails by Manh C Dang

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Congratulations on winning the Parenthood: Indelible Memory contest. Had I seen this post sooner, I would have voted for it too.

Your overall theme of respect for a person's character and good deeds, without regard for (or in spite of) the individual's current status and/or past blunders, runs clearly through this well-written story, providing a vital lesson passed from father to son.

This resonates with me, as my own father taught me much the same lesson in his own way -- including by the example of his own actions, as has happened in your story too.

Life in this world would be so much better if ALL children were raised this way.

For one thing, there would be a lot less tolerance for mobs defacing and tearing down statues and/or destroying other artefacts in an effort to erase our past history, thus depriving new generations of the opportunity to learn from our culture's past errors.

Superb, and aptly illustrated.
Comment Written by WalkerMan on 19-Jun-2020


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