St. Louis Chapter 6 part 1
Chapter 15 of the book St Louis
I always skip the "previously" parts and take the read as is, but I will keep in mind that I am mid-book.
All notes are in the order I thought than, and they can be taken or left as you see fit.
You are certainly one of the more professional writers here, making the "review" job difficult, but probably more important. I tend to read pieces as in progress, but this was clearly honed. If I see your name pop up again in future I will be sure to tackle it with a finer comb. I was a bit taken aback here though.
In terms of story, it was a fine read, and my mind didn't wander, but I also wasn't totally gripped. Maybe if I go back, I will be,but I get a feeling of "not much happened here" though the early confusion over date-no-date did add a pinch of conflict and set the atmosphere for this interaction quite well.
I think I've said enough for now. A fine write, not to my taste, but enjoyed it regardless, so I guess that is a solid compliment, at the very least, it is meant that way.
I hope to read more in the future.
Opening line is good mood setting.
"So early? ... Middle of the night." I understand the meaning clearly, but this reads to me as contradictory.
Genuine sounding dialogue otherwise.
It's rare that I enjoy dialogue with no breaks, but this works, very effectively actually.
Nothing of particular note past here
Comment Written by A.J. Dodd (AD) on 27-May-2019