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  Posted: November 25, 2019      Views: 32

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Retired Marine; retired high school teacher; married 34 years; father of three; five grandchildren; one rescue granddog.

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"Scene at a Christmas Shop 4" by Bill Schott

Scene continues in a huge Christmas-themed store. Pons has punished Red for hurting Ned and has now enlisted Pallas to help find his sad cousin.

Pallas: (
Walking over from a serpentine line of kids waiting to see Santa Claus) They ain't seen Ned over there. I figured he'd be a cinch to wanna see ol' Nick a the North. 

Pons: He's seen Santa today already. It was Pez.

Pallas: Oh, yeah.  Hahahaha.  He must need money bad ta get dressed up in that big red suit and put on that itchy white beard.

Pons: I do it every year.

Pallas: Oh, really. Do ya make a list of all the good little urchins you're gonna take toys to in your sleigh?

Pons: I play Santa at the children's theater a few days before Christmas.

Pallas: Ned help with that?

Pons: No. Ned is usually one of the audience members.

Pallas: Classic Ned. The forever kid.

Pons: He's a good person, Pallas. He's got a big heart and -- damn -- it's broken right now.

Pallas: What happened anyways?

Pons tells Pallas about Ned and the balloon, the story of Jack and the Beanstalk, and Red.

Pallas: Listen. I ain't no big Ned fan, but I feel for the schmuck anyways. I'm gonna help you find him, AND, I'm gonna refer your cousin Red to my brother for an attitude adjustment.

Pons: I've dealt with him already.

Pallas: That's okay. This is the kind of thing Pez gets a kick outta.

Pons: I wouldn't want Red hurt any worse than I'd do.

Pallas: Well then ya shouldn't a told Pez.

Pons: I can't believe Pez would hurt Red that badly. He gave Ned a magic balloon just a bit ago.

Pallas: No kiddin'!  Uh oh. Pez gave Ned something nice and -- he smiled and all that?

Pons: Yeah. It was a big deal for Ned right then.

Pallas: Maybe I shouldn't tell Pez then. I couldn't -- really -- in good conscience.

Pons: Good God! What do you think Pez would do?

Pallas: (Blank faced for a moment)  Skip it. Let's just find Ned.

Pons: He was really hurt. He might have just gone home.

Pallas: Let's check the parking lot. What's he drive?

Pons: A Schwinn.

Pallas: Like in bicycle?

Pons: Yeah. He can drive and has a driver's license, but just likes to ride.

Pallas: I didn't ask.

To be continued...

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