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 Category:  General Poetry
  Posted: January 25, 2019      Views: 327
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TREISCHEL 

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Retired from Lockheed Martin as a Purchasing Manager on August 26, 2011 after 44 years with the company. Born in St. Paul. Married for 40 years. Lived in St James, Long Island and Co - more...

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Chapter 472 of the book Little Poems
A Decannelle
"The Coming" by Treischel


Morning came in flashing glory,
with strange movements in the sky.
Stars were moving, dancing, swirling.
Then a vision caught my eye.
There, it stood on the horizon.
Couldn't quite identify.
Seemed to be a fiery jewel
holding in a glowing cross.
Could this be the second coming?
Moments held me at a loss.

There and then, I knelt in torment,
lost in silent, fervent prayer.
Thought about the life I'm living.
Filled me with a deep despair.
Was I worthy of God's blessing?
Wondered what my sins declare.
Recognized my past digressions.
Asked forgiveness on the spot.
Tear drops soaked the shoreline gravel.
"Save me!" was my foremost thought.

Felt a presence growing closer.
Knew it sensed contrite shed tears.
Tenderness was all around me,
Comforting my deepest fears.
Then there came His gentle sweet voice
softly speaking in my ear.
"You have been a faithful servant,
shared my message everywhere,
faithful to my ten commandments."
I was lifted to the air.


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Author Notes
This picture was taken by my daughter, Aisha. She sent it to me saying, "I thought I saw Jesus coming today." That inspired my poem. My poetic description of the event known as the Rapture.

This poem is a Decannelle.
The Decannelle is:
1. A Decastich (or Decatain), a poem in 10 lines.

2. Metered in trochaic tetrameter with alternating 8-7-8-7-8-7-8-7-8-7 syllables causing the odd numbered lines to end with feminine end words, and the even lines having two end rhymes (a, and b).

3. Rhymed. The rhyme scheme is:
xaxaxaxbxb (with the x being the unrhymed line).
Sort of a hop-scotch rhyming pattern of every other line.

Trochaic - a line made up of trochees. The trochaic line is the opposite of iambic. In a two syllable metered foot, the hard accent is on the first syllable rather than the second.

Tetrameter - a poetic line of 4 metered feet. Each foot contains 2 syllables. So tetrameter contains 8 syllables per line.

Trochaic Tetrameter - where the stressed syllables (S) is first and the unstressed syllable (U) is second, for 4 meteric feet. S-U, S-U, S-U, S-U. They went rowing down the river

Iambic Tetrameter - where the stressed syllables (S) is second and the unstressed syllable (U) is first, for 4 meteric feet. U-S, U-S, U-S, U-S.
He said, "To be, or not to be."

This photograph is part of the author's family album.

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