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 Category:  Family Poetry
  Posted: August 9, 2019      Views: 115
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Chapter 30 of the book Fragmentation
Performance Poetry
"Myself and Someone Else" by estory
Voice A Voice B
(male) (female)

I don't know I don't know
What I wanted. What happened.
I know I wanted I needed space,
To get someplace. I needed
I wanted a career, To find myself,
I wanted to In all of this.
Be somebody. I know
I wanted kids, I didn't just want
I wanted To follow along.
All kinds of things. I wanted to go places,
Have my own life.
It didn't work out
That way. I suppose It just wasn't working
I didn't think Out the way I thought
It all out It was supposed
All the way through. To work out.
I have my own life,
I didn't know You know.
What to say,
All the time. What I'm saying
But in the end, Is that there is
I have to think More to life
Of myself. Than me and you.

There is me.
What I want.
What I need.
What I need.
What I want.
I need my space.
I need some time I have to make more time
To think about me For myself, find
And where I am Where I am
In all of this. In my life.

Where I want to go.
So I guess I'll call you
This is goodbye. When I get there.
If I get there.

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Author Notes
This is my first performance poem, and I wanted to keep it as simple as possible. This is for two simultaneous voices; spaces indicate breaks in speaking, so one voice will be talking in some spots while the other is silent. And vice versa. The voices here speak of a break up, an emotional divorce, as they focus on themselves and increasingly have no room for the other person in their conversation. I tried to work this for lots of musical effects; phasing of similar sounds, words, and phrases, counterpoints, and simultaneous sound effects, sometimes denser, sometimes less dense and diverging. The two voices speaking together of two very different lives lived at the same time in a relationship, two very different egos diverging, I think really captures the sense of how two people cannot be really in a relationship without compromise and a common viewpoint. I thought the theme would be a perfect trial for the construction. Let me know what you think.
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